I actually quite like the length of these chapters. And I'm generally not a fan of made-up characters, but I love this little world you've created. Please update soon! I've put this on my story alert list and I hope I get an alert soon!

Well done and never stop writing!

cool...but you need longer chapters

i like the story but the chapters are too short for my liking.

Fascinating. Nice parallel storyline, but with an original twist. Beautifully written.

This is getting interesting. We got badguys now and now we need a goodguy to fight them.

Looks interesting so far. I hope you'll be incorporating some of the Jossverse characters in the upcoming chapters. Please continue soon...

you're such a tease :) . . .more, more!

tell me more, tell me more! you've got me hooked and there aren't even any Scoobies here yet!

interesting perspective. awesome write!
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