 Fyrloche 2009-11-08 . chapter 20 Interesting story. I like it. I recently got reinterested in He-man anddecided to read some of the stories on FF. This is the first one and I'm not disappointed in my choice. I've even got an ides in the back of my mind for a story similar to this one in which Adam finally tells everyone off but I haven't gotten around to writting it yet. Same thing you said earlier, I've got way too many stories unfunished, as it is. Keep up the good work. |
 Teela's Snakestaff 2009-09-15 . chapter 20Oh man, what a way to leave a body hanging! It was a very good chapter, but I felt the tone was a little off from the rest of the story. This was probably due to the large gap in posts, but when read straight through I felt jarred by the different tense and overall construction of the chapter. I'm not sure I can describe it better than that.
I hope you will be able to continue with this story. I've really identified with it as I was once in a very difficult place myself and had to be on suicide watch. The anger, confusion, frustration and guilt Adam displays is something I remember with alacrity. You have done a masterful job in capturing that. I've read many fanfics, but this is the first that has really tackled Adam's situation and truly explored the emotional side of such a complex and difficult problem. Keep up the great work! |
 sakura blossoms4 2009-08-21 . chapter 4me love dis story so much |
 Carla Sanchez 2009-07-12 . chapter 20This is another interesting story. I hope you update again soon. |
 anon 2009-07-08 . chapter 20 I am really impressed with this story! It is really rare to find interesting takes on this genre so I was so pleased to find this. I'm really glad this was updated and not forgotton about and cannot wait for the next instalment. I usually try to give an actual critique when I review but well sorry to disappoint but I cannot find any major grammar errors or obvious mistakes perhaps the odd typo but that is it and i'm not even sure of that. Your structure and pacing are excellent and as for characterisation im really impressed, its hard to get Teela to be her usual firey self and yet still compassionate and likable, Adam is fantastically characterised his breakdown is plausible and his character remains consistent leading the reader to actually believe the experiance. All other characters are likewise well developed and explored it really is a genuine surprise to find so many well developed characters when there is temptation to go for 2D stereotypes. I wish i could give you something to improve upon in your writing but honestly I can't and that is testement to your writing (I am really piccy in fanfics especially on the differences between English and American grammar and spelling issues, I live in the UK therefore use UK English and so have problems with American English no offense is meant here). I hope you are able to update soon, but dont rush I prefer a long wait for a good well written piece than a quick update of inferior quality. So well done and I hope to see an update when you are ready good luck! |
 wildpartyhouse247 2009-07-07 . chapter 20Please update soon. |
 King Kubar 2009-06-30 . chapter 20Finally some action. I like how you make Adam so vunerable, it believable, unlike most stories where in two minutes hes fine. This has true drama, true romance, true emph. Cant wait for the next piece. Keep up the wonderfull work. |
 eaglemith 2009-06-29 . chapter 20 wow! i'm so happy for update. I hope you can bring us a new chapter sooner, with such a cliffhanger. Please don't let us waiting for too long. I love this story. |
 MadaMag 2009-06-29 . chapter 20Yay, an update finally!
Maybe you'll try scene per chapter per month?
Don't let us hang for too long! |
 Jane Q. Doe 2009-06-28 . chapter 9I love this sentence:
He’d seen that expression before, on the face of a woman looking at the man she loved, and he had a feeling that he was looking at the future queen of Eternia. |
 SonicH2O 2009-06-28 . chapter 20This was a great chap. So ill forgive the long wait lol. But with such a cliffhanger I hope you can update sooner!! I love this fic. so much! Adam just needs to tell someone. poor kid. |
 JtheChosen1 2009-06-28 . chapter 20Sol glad for the update! Great work here! |
 ScareGlow 2009-06-28 . chapter 20Wow, this was a nice surprise! I'd almost forgotten about this story, but I liked the new chapter; hopefully, you'll manage indeed to post a new chapter rather sooner than later! :) |
 Delora2047 2009-06-28 . chapter 20Very dramatic turn of events. |
 Kyubbiman 2009-05-01 . chapter 19Great Story I hope you update soon |