Ahh! Great! Way to use sex not just to be sex but also to symbolize the progression of their relationship. Excellent! I also love the use of the rain and the word green to add a feeling of lushness to the piece. Good work!

Page mark, and I hate to do this because I know it'll be delicious.

Cheers Jen

Wow, awesome fic.

this is one of my few favorite Jess/Rory stories... your descriptions are amazing, I could almost see the colors and feel the humid air on my skin. Perfection!

Must I sing your praises once again? This,also was a wonderful work. I love your writing style...vicious!, because it draws in the brain, and the brain is but helpless to read and want more. The air is wet. Quiet. Green. I am a firm believer air has no color, but I doubted myself because you told me to.

Wow, just wow. This is so amazing.

Wow! You are an amazing writer! You make them perfect!!
It’s beautiful! The details, their emotions, their feelings, the way they act around each other!! Brilliant!!

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He just wants her to remember this.

Just wants her to say yes.

To give in.

To be brave. If not by speculation of what she could have, by fear of loss at what she could lose. He knows he can’t compete with her perfect life.

So he just tries to give her a different perfection. Something more than all of it. To watch her bloom in transparent colors underneath him, to see her lose logic in all of this.

And she does.

I loved this fic. You wrote them so well I felt like I was actually there experiencing everything. I also really loved the ending where they just kiss b/c I think thats so much better than the arguments and everything else that surrounds her and Dean, her mom and her, etc.

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That is just the sweetest thing I have ever read. I loved it! And one more for being so great !

wow

Again, beautiful language.

I feel like your work is worth the attention and a proper review, but really, there's not much to criticize.

From the setting to the characters, you grasped them perfectly. The way you handled dialogue and balanced it with movement & gestures... it shows talent and close obsevration in real life.

Keep up the good work. Best wishes.

Jon from SMInc. :)

Beautiful! If you want to take it further I would. How about the confrontation of Dean, Lorelai, Jess and Rory... Go for it! There's got to be a way to describe what was meant by Ok at the end too... I mean I can imagine, but you could start another chapter if you want.

Wow, that was great. I loved the imagery... it felt like I was really there watching. I liked how you made them like they are and not au. They were really in character. It was a captivating story.