CONGRATULATION!
FIRST SHIKATEMA THING EVER!
woot
way to break some new ground

So... if you put it in the SHikaTema section does that mean that he chooses Temari? Just asking. Because if he did I would like glomp you to death man. Well maybe not to death. If you died then you could never write any more awesome poems for the world to enjoy. :)

aw... >< well since this was under the characters shikamaru and temari, i guess that's who he choosed? i like this a lot!

wow. I think shikamaru should end up with Temari. they look so cute together.

not bad...not bad at all

that was very good. i think there will be many fan fics about this later on. you could even make a longer story about this and then have the two get in a cat fight over shika. keep it up. * bows and disapers in sand*

Very interesting concept. I agree with your other reviewer that, if you're ever struck by inspiration, this could be the seed for a nice story. I've seen pairings with Shikamaru, but never a triangle.
As for the poem itself, well, I admit I'm completely hopeless when it comes to poetry, but to me the poem barely rhymes and its rhythm isn't uniform. Sorry, maybe it's an ignorant's opinion, but it's what it looks like to me.

O, I see you've been reading the manga ^^ Yay, so I'm not the only one who thinks that Shikamaru seems to like Temari, or at least attracted to her for saving his butt. I would like to see a story played out, so... contact me if you decide to write a story to this.