That was good actually. Hector and Jacen reminded me of Jacob and Edward from Twilight, but yeah, I really liked it. You know I reckon yours is the only story with a continuosly happy plot without being sappy. Godd luck with your next projects!

It's nice. It did have, well, bad grammar, but a good plot nonetheless. i read your work first in Fictionpress and I can tell your writing has improved a lot since you wrote this story and the story Unbreak My Heart, which is excellent, I must say. Anyway, good work!

this is so nice...plz keep writing...and i'll keep reading!

reali good...still reading this...

Nice filler, but the language and clothing seems a bit modern. Unless, of course, your story is more of a modern story, but I usually think of fairy tales of things that happened "Once upon a time."

K, going on..

Note the Chapter One Review Alert!

Nice story; it's different from all those princess stories that goes along the line of, "I don't like him, I won't marry him, and you can't make me." Which is sort of strange coming from a princess, considering her status puts duty before pleasure.

But is her brother a half-brother? Because if the crown prince died, then wouldn't her brother become the crown prince and she wouldn't have to be the crown princess? Just wondering; it seemed a bit strange to me.

But I'm going to go read chapter two...

Great book! i loved it!

there was no conflict
but i loved the story neway

I came across one of your stories at fictionpress first... and then looking for some more goodies I found this one... I must say this has been one of the best written stories I have ever read on any fanfiction site, other favorites were also yours...XD

It's really hard to find decent spelling and grammar around here, much less nearly perfect!

Just one little detail I've seen repeatedly in your work, you fail to conjugate past tense and third person correctly most of the time; usually one can see "did had" or "did looked" os "does lies" and stuff like that mostly... not really a big deal since the stories have such great wording, but it can be somewhat bothersome...

Most descriptions are very poetic in a way, particularly in the first chapters, one can really get that "fairy tale" vibe..^^ and it's certalny a plesant piece of work.

(By the way... I LOVE IT! *love*)

Great story! I read this awhile ago and I thought I'd reviewed but I guess I forgot so I thought I'd do it now. I love the second epilogue, it was the perfect ending.

that is a reeally weird jump to make.
ten years into the future?
jeez.

interesting idea,
i've always liked the animal names for things, like in aboriginal stories.
you switched tense though, big no-no.

This is really great. I love how you create your own different setting and characters and don't just focus on the famous fairy tales and places that everyone already knows.

At first when I realized that Darla was a soldier, I have to admit that I was a little discouraged in reading it because I was thinking...yeah, a girl who's a soldier...like that would happen...But then I started to realize that I could see myself probably in the same situation, and now I love that part of the story; how she is not just like every other princess out there. So…props for that.

I liked how they fell in love, but it could have used a little more detail. Overall the idea was very cute, but more details would make it amazing. Great job, and please keep writing stuff like this!

I love it.

i love the story but it could do without the epilogue- or at least some of it. the ending was very abrupt. i think you could make the epilogue and the second epilogue into another story. i love the part about Jacen and Darla, but i couldn't really get into the whole Bry and Greg part. it moved a little too fast to get really connected with the characters. other then that I love your work. Sugar Rush was an awesome story too.