  Kraven Ergeist 2005-08-19 . chapter 1A smart, symbolic read, but learn to use paragraphs when writing dialogue. Whenever another person says something, make a new paragraph. That's about my only complaint, though. Keep up the good work! |
| Lilithia 2005-06-25 . chapter 1 This is beautiful!
You've captured the character EXACTLY!
When I finished reading this, I went *wow*. Great job, keep it up! I shall be watching for your next chapter. |
| Ayato 2005-04-09 . chapter 1 Excellent. |
| Dhani's Apple Scruff 2004-12-04 . chapter 1 aw T_T well done! ...to make a revelation... i cried...*sniff*
~Dhani's Apple Scruff~ |
| Juciy 2004-10-13 . chapter 1 Beautiful and depressing. |
| Infinitis 2004-08-04 . chapter 1 Y.Y I like! So good, makes me want to cry!! Hee hee. Loved it ^_^6 |
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