Overall, I have to say it was an interesting concept. While I don't think Wil would have gone over to the bandit's side for money alone, the 'fic in itself was unique, and you get points for that.

I liked the interaction between Kent and Lyndis, but I honestly think Sain (and at times, Kent) was out of character. Sain said a lot of things that I doubt he would say, and Kent did as well (but not nearly as much). Kent cracked jokes, and was generally not his usual serious self. Sain was too grumpy- now, if you'd have explained that by way of hunger (lack of food in the group), or anything else, that would make sense.

(Why did Lyndis smile and say "Thanks" to Kent? For bandaging her arm? But then why did he look at her with a perplexed look?)

I think this could have drug out for another chapter or so, with more detail- and more explanation to various characters ways of acting, if that makes any sense.

Oh, and I could definitely see Florina diving in to try to save Lyndis, and ending up getting hurt, herself. Poor gal. (She's such a sweetie, though.) And the way Lyndis ignored her own injuries made absolute sense. I don't know if she would have left Wil alone with Florina, though... I know I wouldn't have- hell no. I mean, I would think she would stay with him- perhaps let him get the water alone, but not be alone with her friend, that he could easily kill if left there with her.

Anyway, overall, good job. It's nice to read something that isn't the "same old, same old", if you know what I mean.

Cheers,
-Manna

Heh.,. Sain, Wil, and Lyn were slightly out of character, but other than that, it was quite good!

I liked. Interesting change of events.

Very nice. I have FE, and I found this an excellent story. Perhaps more of this sort of thing is in order.

Nicely done, Vil! It's a very interesting premise, certainly... Though, I do have a hard time believing that Wil would join up with bandits, no matter how much money trouble he was in... I didn't pin him as that kind of person. (And wasn't his money supposedly stolen, anyway? I don't think he'd be too eager to join the men who robbed him...) Even if he did end up with the bandits, though, I doubt he would try to kill innocents, as long as he knew what he was doing. And you implied he did. It's just that, Wil's one of my favorite characters (which isn't saying much... they're all so awesome, it's hard to pick ^^;) and I really don't like the idea of him almost killing Lyn on purpose... But that's just me. Anyway, I really did enjoy your story. Please, give us more of your excellent works soon!

Nicely done. Keep up the good work.

I liked it!