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Hello! I like your story so far and want you to write more. I am not a perfect writer, but I did notice a couple of things. You can either ignore them or keep them in mind-- it's up to you. My first suggestion-- perhaps refer to Dumbledore by his last name. That way you don't have to keep refering to him as Albus D. My second suggestion is-- I noticed some of the names were not capitalized. I'm assuming that this is your first fanfiction because I saw you only posted one story. Keep up the good work and you'll get better when you write more. I hope I've been a little helpful.

These chapters are way too short. But I like the concept of the story so far. Keep going I wanna see how it all concludes.

hey! its superspunky7. i wrote diary of depression. okay i checked out your reviews, so im gonna try to not repeat them. everysingle one of them told you your chapters need to be longer. Now, all though that is true, u only need to stop rushing them. u would always say "i'll update later today." well, u should type out your chapter and make sure that if u were the reader, is this going to meke sence? are people going to read this? the idea is very good. even i wouldn't have thought of something that clever. just expand on it. make more details and if u think a chapter is too short, maybe combine what you would have made two chapters. now, i am really liking this story, and im hoping you'll take my advice. awaiting the next chapter!
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Okay, I'm reviewing! :)

The plot is interesting, but it seems that you're giving Dumbledore a whole different personality by calling him 'Albus D'. You might want to change that for upcoming chapters, just a pointer. And before you post up, do your work on Microsoft Word so it can pick our your spelling and grammar mistakes...

Your chappies are a bit short, so you could maybe make them a bit longer? I think this fic has great potential. The pairings are god. I like it so far! :)

loving.wood

Ok, you keep asking me to review so I will.
The chapters are short, use spell check, ok? I'm a total Ginny/Blaise or Ginny/Draco person so I don't mind the pairings. ;) Just kidding, I'm not going to get personal! I think your story is nice, the plot has been done a lot though. I like Harry Potter stories and editing thiings, so if you need a reviewer before you post, my services are available.
Thanks for reviewing my stuff and I'd be happy to review yours whenever.
Mary

Interesting. A bit short though. It has a good concept or maybe it's just me thinking very badly at the moment, know? Well, I like it and will be adding it to my list. You should read my other stories if you like my COTC fan. Shekiken also appers in Deterioration of the World. Go to my name and click it for more details. COTC chapter will be up as soon as I fix it. It's becoming too romancey!But...MALACHAI IS MINE< REMEMER THAT>!

OMgosh, I love your story and i remember and I think i read it a while ago. i just hope your chapters are longer than a page! thanks for reviewing my story and check out my hp ones that I think you'll like. thanks

-Holly

Hey...degrassichick92 here (well obviously, lol). It's really good, is this gonna be a DM/HG pairing? Sorry, just a fan of Draco and Hermione. Anyways, it's really good.
Keep going!
Lotsa love,
degrassichick92

u might want 2 combine ur chapters to make them longer. good story though.

NICE JOB.,...THE CHAPTERS ARE TOO SHORT THOUGH

I LOVE IT ALREADY..ITS VERY DIFFERENT ...VERY GOOD PLOT..MAYBE U NEED LONGER CHAPTERS BUT...NE WAY WELL DONE!

It's good, but you should make the chapters longer and more draco... but thats just me

Udate! Please dat was too short!

haha...very nice chapter...u must make it longer. continue