A poignant a meaningful story, but your characterization of Nagi, albeit a secondhand characterization, seems to be a bit off. I mean, by the end of the Tenchi Universe series, Nagi was definitely one that you could have considered one of the "Good" guys. As such, having her be the one that attacks just doesn't work for me... Still a great fic, but one that I can't say is absolutely perfect. (Of course, that doesn't mean that it isn't better than something than I could have wrote, but hey we're being critical of your work here, so you leave my crud outta this!)

Is it possible? is it possible for a story to hold so much..emotion? I say yes! this was great! I awlays knew that if kiyone had to die, she would do it with the style that only she can! Damn Nagi! Damn her directly to hell!

How sad...even if I don't like Kiyone all that much. Still it was an interesting perspective and all. Good writing.

Nice fic (and so sad too! ;_;) but I must say, you're missing some lines to the story. I've read the original (if I can call it that) in the Tenchi Muyo Fanfic Archive. Thought I'd point that out to you! _ Keep up the good work!