i love it!Um, I don't really have anything to comment on, because it was so great, I don't have to critique. The only thing I have to add is that you do have a few gramical mistakes, otherwise, it's great!

12th grade?
Really..
I'm not even that old and yet I understood the story completely without having to question what happened ^^;

Well gosh, I don't know what to say. I'm speechless!
That story was incredible! A very sad and tragic ending. I think you should make a sequel.

the ending...

*cries*

...uh...wow? So he died? Um...er...uh...well I'm kinda speechless. o_o I really like this story ^_^

Wow. That was really good. The story seems vaguely familiar but I haven't read it before. Very good. Pretty freaky and surprising! Good work!

*sinff* that story was so sad!! T_T

omg,that was so sad

omg great story *sob* hope u think up more amazing stories 4 me to read! luv ya lots!

oh poor yoh... hao and anna shame

I think the problem with the ending and why some people didn't get it cause you hinted but never actually told everyone something that intantatly told them that Hao and Anna slept together. That's why everyone was so confused. I actually thought Yoh had Seen Anna and Hao kiss until I got the real explination.Anyway, good story.

=P meh, i understood it.

Wow, this story is so touching. Made me cry a whole lot. POOR POOR POOR yoh. T_T . omg, BAD BAd ANNA! *gives yoh a virtual huggle* oh god, i seriously need a good yoh-living / anna fic for this one. its so sad, i seriously cannot bare yoh death fics. BUt man i love this fic. T__T.

-keiko

it wasn't at all complicated to understand. i understood right away and i'm in 8th grade.

>< YOH-SAMA!

this is both a good and bad review.im not a flamer i swear!but-you made yoh die dammit!and hao(i despise him)was the man who made him die!well,besides that part,i really liked your story!500 stars!!anywayz,i really still didnt like the ending and if theres going to be a sequel,yoh better come back to life!

ja ne!