Totally out of caracter for Starbuck but nicely written.

You can't leave me hanging like this. I need to know what happens now, not just to Sheba but mainly to Starbuck.

While you write, don't try to go to fast, take you time to evolve the emotions playing through people. I know these caracters but perhaps not everyone does.

Waaa! He was mean to Cassie! Aww, very dramatic.

Well great story and I love the concept of it. You need to work on your formatting and grammar a bit. Nevertheless it has real potential. Good )

Hmmmm. It's a little disjointed at first but it's getting better. I hope to see more of it posted soon!

Jade:You have the makings of a great horror writer.Maybe when you've finished you and I can have a talk about a publishing deal.This is coming along great.Post next part soon.

It's a good story. I think that the artifact needs to be explained a little more. For instance, why does it do things that it does to people when they touch it, who leave something like that behind. I just like a little more background is all, but the story is a great one and nothing could make what you have written any better.

Really good story. I love it, but when did it start, and what exactaly started it.

AAAHHHHHHHH!

Starbucks's in big trouble an part of him cares that he's probably gonna get spanked and the other part don't!1

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I need to write biger...WRITE MORE! WRITE MORE!

PLEASE CONTINUE THIS! IT'D KILLING ME I TELL YOU! NEED MORE...MELTING...

OH. NOW I'M OKAY! i SEE PART ONE...HEHEHEHE

Can't wait to find out what happens on the bridge.

What's in the box?