Okay...no.

That was so dumb. I'm sorry, but it just...no...

HEy i wanna see more Jay beucase he is sooo HOTTT!1

That definitely sucked.

Spellcheck would be good... And maybe drawing the story out would be good...

Yikes! What a steaming pile of rat poop.

This is crap. I've NEVER seen such CRAP. You should die. You shouldn't write.

Uh... can someone say sucky?

Nice story, but I'd run it througha spell-checker and then fix the formatting. It's almost impossible to properly appreciate a good fic if you have to concentrate just to read it.

good plot, but spelling and grammer could use a bit of work.

aahaa. alright then

sorry, man, but this made no sese -.-

You had some good parts in it but the end was kina due there is a few changes to be made but I think you really got something here. I think you should make this a bit longer and fix somethings like have Loki stat longer and give Jay longer lines.

I don't know how to put this nicely, so I'll be blunt. This is crap. You write like an eight year old. Unless you really are an eight year old, in which case, it's not bad.

Ummmmm...Bartleby and Loki went to heaven at the end of the film...not Hell. They have no reason to befriend Azarael. Not to mention, Satan hates Azarael. Satan tries to kill the renegade demon in the film. Dogma and this thing don;t go together at all

This is a good fic, funny and the dialogue is true to the characters, I'm quite impressed.