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| Decce 2006-04-17 ch 1,  | abuse?!! Well, I know absolutely nothing about the show (?) ANGEL at all, but I gotta say - it's kind of cute xD. Ahahaha. I hope Angel stops being broody, though. Cordy seems like the nice kind of person (and Wesley - the 8D type). Flawless writing style! Good god, you should consider the career of an author. Your books would sell ridiculously well in the market xD. --June |
| angel-cordy 2005-03-24 ch 1, | abuseThat was good please do a sequel. |
| babee 2005-01-03 ch 1, | abuseI loved this... I'm right in the middle of re-watching my Angel dvd's and I'm at the end of the third season. The whole Cordelia-Angel-Groo situation has been kind of a sore spot with me. ~Creana |
| Esperanza Fuega 2004-08-11 ch 1, | abuseCouplet is my favorite episode in the series, and so I thought I'd review. I like this chapter, but I felt it should be longer. (I know the fic's complete, but hey, any crit for the next one, right?) You seem a little fuzzy on the dialogue-grammar and some capitalization (which were probably typos, anyway, so I won't go over them.) The dialogue? That, I'll go over. Just as a note, I'm sorry if I come off as snarky. ~"Thanks" Wesley says ... ~ It should be: "Thanks," Wesley says ... When you're joining speech to action, you use a comma. Always. And try not to have a ~"speech," action, "speech" thing. That seems a little run-on-y to me. Also, why are you writing in present tense? This could be equally or better-done in past, I think. Your friend in fic, Esperanza Fuega |
| njm1390 2004-08-11 ch 5, | abuseits very good keep going i love angel and cordy together |
| lily 2004-08-10 ch 5, anon. | abuseWow the ending sucked!! Was that really the end? |
| Freezyboncoolipants 2004-08-10 ch 5, | abuseI'm adding you to my author alerts coz your characterisation was so good! I definately wanna see more Cordelia stories from you, coz you got her personality perfectly! Chapter 4 was much better too! |
| Wesfan1234 2004-08-05 ch 4, | abuseWas there a problem with Ch. 4? I can't remember. I like the Note to Self lines. Very funny. I hope you keep it funny. I like it. |
| Joan DeBaca 2004-08-02 ch 4, anon. | abusePretty good. But too short. Your grammer wasn't "A-100%" perfect but who has that. You have Cordy's personality down pat. It's weird the way our minds work when proof reading our own work. We see what we want to see. Try a longer story by deciding on what your basic story is going to be about then expand on it. Good Job. (Pen name - Kinoa) |
| ka-ool 2004-08-02 ch 4, anon. | abuselove the story so far. you gotta update it soon! |
| Freezyboncoolipants 2004-08-01 ch 4, | abuseI LOVE your characterisation, but things seem to be going kinda fast, although maybe it's just because it was only a short update. Please put the next chapter on soon! |
| angel-cordy 2004-07-31 ch 4, | abuseSo far so good. Can't wait to read the rest of the story. |
| Elizabeth 2004-07-28 ch 3, anon. | abuseHey good story line. Can't wait to read more though. |
| Hotsatin 2004-07-28 ch 3, | abuseHay where are you? Why haven't you reviewed in like age's/ Come girlthe story is getting good and I need to know what happens or I'm going to die. |
| AbiSnocom 2004-07-03 ch 3, | abusei love this story and you so have to keep going and hurry with the next chapters. okay and sorry for all the 'o' usage. ;-> |