OH PLEASE come back! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE come back and finish this one! Well, Update at least! Please try. Instand Message me. Odango Atama135 or e-mail me at Roxy51387@ I will help you if you want me to. I come up with interesting though crazy (lol) ideas that I think are good...hopefully you'll like them as well. As I said, IM or e-mail me if you want to read them. I love helping people and sharing my thoughts and opinions and ideas.

WOW! I love your story. I think that you do J.M. Barrie's story Justice. Please don't stop writting!! Please!!

Oh wow! This was so great! I'm a huge Peter Pan fan. I've been one since I was a little kid and the first book I learned how to read was Disney's Peter Pan before reading the original and then The Little White Bird. I love your story because unlike so many Peter Pan fanfics out there it captures the same innocence and cruelness and playful tone that the wonderful Barrie did. I LOVE Hook and I love that you are seeking to truly capture his essence, which involves more than just his wickedness, but his longing to be loved and his strange sense of good form and love of beauty. I also liked that you have a mother figure in the form of Angelica. People just don't seem to understand that Peter was always looking for a mother and not as much a girlfriend or lover (although there are undertones) and always put in some feminist 20th century girl that always seems out of place. They don't seem to understand the difference between a strong character who can be a tomboy, yet still a girl and just having a plain pig-headed argumentative "femenist-i'm-always-right-and-peter-pan-should-bow-to-my-stunning-ways-and-beautiful-self". You do, and that's what makes your fic so much fun to read. Great job! Keep up the good work.

I am in awe... O_O This was wonderfully written. Other than the apparent scene changes, your writing is very smooth and flawless. I shall now commend my anxious wait for the next chapter. =)

Wow. This is another fantastic chapter! You write this so beautifully! Almost as if you are a storyteller and I'm a young girl sitting by your feet listening to you. Please keep up the great wouk and update again very soon!

very good story! I really like it. Please update soon.

I almost wept for joy when I found the Author Alert notification in my inbox. Welcome back!

You're still holding true to Sir Barrie's style of writing, and it's quite charming and so very well done.

Just in case you are not aware, on October 22nd Miramax will be releasing Finding Neverland. a fictional account of J. M. Barrie and his creation of Peter Pan. It stars Johnny Depp, Kate Winslet and Dustin Hoffman. Go to http://w,miramax.com/findingneverland/ if you'd like to see the trailer.

Wonderful opening paragraph! Perfect way to set the mood- it’s exactly like how J.M. Barrie would’ve written it. Bravo.

Chapter 1
I really am enjoying this story; it holds true to the original story. I think the description of each lost boy was wonderfully done; the way you set it up was also excellent. I love the narration; when I read it I can hear the woman with the English accent as clear as day in my head.

I don’t know if I like the white-blonde spikey hair as much though, it doesn’t seem to fit. I know the story is supposed to be set in present day, but I cant visualize Angelica with spiked hair.

I liked the beginning tale of Hook, but there were some words that didn’t seem to fit (psyche, for example). Also, the phrase ‘unloved and alone’ was overly used.

Chapter 2
I really like the story so far. The narration is going quite well; it stays true to the original narration’s language and dialogue. I loved the ‘…bane of my existence’ part- great!

I am astounded by the way this story was written! I found hardly anything that needed reworking! I love the narration and the fantastic experience it takes me on. Keep up the good work! I want to know what left the black mark and how Hook plans on defeating Pan! Best of luck in all your future writings!

Lauren

Terrific chapter...I really like your writing voice. I also like both Aria and Angelica's seperate anguishes...although, to be honest, I'm having the teensiest difficulty telling them apart sometimes because of the similar names ^^;;
Keep up the good work!

Good chapter. It had some very chrming elements in it. I liked the last section of it the best. Beautifuly done. Keep up the fantastic work!

wow! REALLY REALLY REALLY good chapter! please hurry and update!! SOON! I can't stand waiting!

Yea, new chapter. I'm really enjoying the style you are using. Do watch out for typos. :)
Looking forward to seeing Hook/Aria develop. ^_^

I was so happy to find the Author Alert notification in my e-mail inbox. This is a charming story. You have a way of creating very vivid images with your words, and the descriptions of the mermaids' lagoon as well as the mermaids were quite beautiful.

* in recognition of a chapter well done, Mab leaves a long feather from a certain white owl for Miss Aria to find *

Hook! ^_^
Ah, I'm greatly enjoying this. :) (I really need to get out the original book and read it, as I haven't yet.)
Please continue.

HEY!
I LIKE IT! I CAN DEFINITELY SEE HOOK ACTING LIKE THAT ESPECIALLY AFTER SUCH A GRIM DEFEAT IN THE BOOKS.there are some things i can't see him saying, maybe thinking, but not saying. but all and all you did a good job embodying the sinister, bad **, and all around sexy not niceness that is Hook. Please update soon.