Reviews for Charmed Childhood

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TVCrazed 2005-12-30 ch 8,	abuseWANT MORE. PLZ UPDATE
Girl007 2005-10-24 ch 8,	abusegood story, pleasure to read it,write more teen fics cause you do great
BrucasDreamerfan-aka Anna 2005-05-29 ch 8,	abusemorwe
andy20 2004-11-30 ch 8,	abusethis chapter was great!!can'r wait for the next one so please update asap!!
futuregirl05 2004-11-15 ch 8,	abusecool paige has a force field and i hope the next chapter with sam in it plz update soon luv the story passions
CharmedMilliE 2004-11-14 ch 8,	abusecool. Paige has a force field. i'm lovin it.
futuregirl05 2004-10-05 ch 1,	abusei think paige is kind of funny plz update soon
AsherSmasher 2004-08-28 ch 7, anon.	abuseOMG! Brilliant story. Please update soon. I love the childhood feel of P/L's love. Urg! I hate Cliffies! That just gives you more of a reason to update! Thank You I Appreciate
klutz101 2004-08-25 ch 7,	abuseupdate soon. Lovin' it! ~Lin-z~
p3charmed4eva 2004-08-25 ch 7,	abuseuh oh that aint good. i feel so bad for these kids, they're gonna be totally tramatized when their adults cause they're like... what 8 and they're killing demons! is this gonna go into teenage years (hope so!) good chapter (BAD CLIFFIE VERY BAD!) update soon!!
CharmedMilliE 2004-08-25 ch 7,	abusewow. thanks for updateing
CharmedMilliE 2004-08-07 ch 6,	abuselove it.
Unforgiveable Meanings 2004-08-06 ch 2,	abusehehe... I LOVE this chapter. It's funny. Paige orbed spider onto their beds, clever. Well, I'm going to read the next ch. Bye!
klutz101 2004-08-04 ch 6,	abuseloved it...update soon
gidgetgirl 2004-08-03 ch 5,	abuseI think this fic needs a lot of work. The idea of having the charmed ones as kids is cute, and there are some good spots, but for the most part, I can't see the show's characters in your characters. Even though they're children, they should still have their personalities. Where's Prue's stubbornness? What about Piper playing the mediator? Phoebe being a little wacky? It's just not there. If you took out the character names, no one would be able to tell who was who, and that means you're doing a poor job of characterization. Beyond that, the grammar as well as just general sentence structure could use a lot of work. I think you could improve this fic by getting a Beta to proofread it for you. I also think the repetitive use of simple sentences becomes monotonous and you spend most of your time telling us what's happening instead of showing us, which makes for a much more dry read. I don't mean to be harsh, but I think you could improve the fic a lot just by putting a little more time and care into each chapter. They feel really generic and thrown together haphazardly, and I don't feel like you've really hit your stride ideas-wise in a way that could separate this fic from any other young charmed fic. Good luck with it.

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