Sad story... superb writing.

Aww, poor Malon. I like the symbolism behind the dirt in the home by the way. Not a fan on Malon/Link myself, but it was still a nice read.

I know you wrote this awhile ago, but I thought I'd leave a note anyway because it was so fantasic. The imagery and the emotions and everything, I wanted to cry for poor Malon. So good job! I like happy endings, but life isn't always happy, is it?

wow. All of this comes out of the blue? I'm speechless...

i LIKE it because it's sad. the way you expressed such strong emotions is impressive to say the least.

Thanks for your review of "Into the Dark." ^^ I think you've done an excellent job with this piece; good metaphors and very well-conveyed emotions. I'm very impressed. Your style has changed considerably since you first started writing here.

Grr... YOU'RE TO GOOD! Truley one of the best Angst fics I've read. It's not too bad... Definately a good-read. I loved it. I love all your work. Mainly, because you're 10 times better than me, got any advice? =P

This was rather dark. I liked your descriptions, particularly of Malon's emotions, and your writing style is highly commendable. Hmm... the only annoying thing is the fact Malon seems to always suffer unrequited love, just because she's "not good enough" - but nevermind. Good story though.

Adios,

- Selah

Holy **. You know, I never really thought of Link not liking Malon; Zelda is such a prudish b**ch, all caught up her country, you'd think she would have no time for him. Therefore, HE would be the angsty one, and he would run to Malon, and... I dunno, though. You should write more stuff like this; you do a TERRIFIC job.

Oh... wow... how you described it, you described how Maron feels so beautifully. I very much feel for her... poor Maron-chan... *hugs*

I see NO sufficient reason for anyone to flame this, at all. It's great that you can write romance so well, yet you actually grasp the conception of angst as well. I have noticed that some people cannot write angst that is actually sad. Kudos on making me sympathize with Malon, a character that I believe isn't necessary in the game. Beautiful writing! Sorry I took so long to review!

Ok, ok...
*cries* This is so sad (that's why I love it)! I love the way you showed Malon's feelings. You, you... *cries more* THE PAIN! THE PAIN WAS SO DAMN WELL DESCRIBED!

Sigh. Sad. Lol, I know you wanna hear more! It was very vivid. You described her emotions so well. It was excellent. I happen to not like Link/Malon pairing, so I rather liked this (chuckles evily) Well done!

You're right, this was sad. Poor, poor Malon. I've read so many fics about Malon coming to terms with the fact that Link doesn't love her... but it's always sad when I read another one. It really is

Usually I think creating angst out of romantic rejection is so safe and cheap, but...
I loved this story. Mostly because I LOVED the third, fourth, and fifth paragraphs (and to a lesser extent, the last one). So much so that I think you should've written this completely from second person. That's probably because of my bias against first person, but never mind.
A couple of things, though. I think comparing the color of the sky to a bruise gets a little repetitious when you use it twice (in the immortal words of my beta, cute descriptions are only cute once). I guess you're trying to make a connection between hurting and pain and such, but find something else to compare the sky's color to if you're going to do it a second time.
Also...I think you should take the Link/Zelda implications out of the story or elaborate on them, because to me it seems like you're hinting at something large and emotional with that line about Malon asking about becoming more like "her" (I'm really assuming you were implying some L/Z relationship here!), but without a Zelink flashback or something it really doesn't mean much. Of course, I might be completely misreading that, and feel free to tell me!
I hope I wasn't too harsh or nitpicky with this...'cause like I said, I loved the story. I'll end this on a positive note, and say that the "dirt" and "grime" that kept recurring in the story were really well handled. :)
Choco