I liked it.

I can picture Fuji like this just fine. Always...somewhere else.
Must be infuriating, for Tezuka at least.

You know, I didn't really have anything negative to say about organization or such (just that I didn't quite understand it, but mainly because it's emotional organization, not logical, and so you'd have to be in the same 'emotional' state to understand it) but as soon as you said it was a 'personal' writing, I was like, oh, that excuses any sort of flow issues, or 'disjointedness'. Because really... if we were to write out what we go around thinking in our heads... it would be the most unorganized, random, scattered piece of writing on EARTH. But it would also be the most realistic. So, in other words, sometimes the more real the emotions are portrayed, the more 'scattered' writing seems. Anyway, other than that... I liked this. Definitely not cliche (been reading WAY too much cliche crap lately) and it was... detachedly hopeless. Like, the atmosphere was strange, kind of airy and out of touch, I really liked how you described it. Anyway, it was certainly a good one-shot. ^_^

That was very good! Um, just wondering, so...they got in a fight...and Fuji was going to crash the car so they both die...correct? Good job, even if I totaly misunderstood the plot!

... is fuji dying or something?

Oh my God. *incoherent* That was...impossibly, unbelievably, utterly...amazing. Beautiful. *sobs* God, people like you are the reason I love fiction.
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Just...wow.
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*still in tears*

Hmm, don't quite know how to judge this story. I don't seem to understand the storyline.

Maybe if you were to write a few more chapters explaning things, then it will be clearer.

The story seems quite vague as to where it is going and what is going on.Did Tezuka fight with Fuji? Did Fuji do something which upset Tezuka?
Why was Tezuka driving fast? Where was Tezuka going? What was Tezuka thinking about while driving?

SO NICE!! Write more, and I'll review every single one of your fics, I promise. I like the angst and PoV switch, but maybe you could reorganize your fic so that it doesn't seem too messy...^^

...Wow. That was really good. ^_^ I liked it. *nodnod*

A bit angsty to me, I don't know why.
But this is good. Very good.

*ui*
kawaii! ^_^
Like this kind of style AND your fic! ^.~