damn good fic

I could feel it in my gut which doesn't happen often

sad and beautiful...i can't leave a review on "falter"..the server or our connection, or something won't let me have it all...will try again tomorrow so this is my last chance at asking, pleading with you about...SNAFU... honestly i'm sorry i truly am a saiyuki fic addict, and when a good one comes along... i kind of need it all! need my fix...ok! ^_~ ! zan

Oh my God. Where do I start with the good?

I loved this. I know it's not a cannon pairing, and never will be, but I love it when people experiment with this kind of stuff. I love how you gave the impression of Roy living Maes' life, even if just for a second, and how you portrayed his feelings of intrusion and need at the same time. Same for Gracia and her need to be with Roy, and just pretend for a moment that he's Maes, and then the awkwardness that follows.

"Forgive me," she says, holding the peice of my heart in her hands." That line was perfect.

And you even made it hopeful at the end.

Lovely.

The more I read your stuff, the more I'm convinced that you're sf's equivalent.

One day, I hope there'll be a showdown between the both of you.

Anyways, the story was good, the way you portrayed Roy and Hughes' wife putting up with his death, but the bed scenes weren't all that interesting. All I pictured in my head was 2 people rocking slowly on a bed, with the woman grabbing onto the front of the guy's shirt.

But the way you portrayed it.. man... I totally re-opened my FMA scans to read ^^

'I must say... This is one fic that i have never read before. It kinda feel strange to know the main characters of this story. Probably, this kind of scenario will never appear in Full Metal Alchemist. Anyways, you may stand a chance if you put this up into the competition. Wish you the best of luck, dude...'

Update sooN!