Logical ending. Nothing big, no feeling of completion, but okay I guest.

"Most lazy writing" ... x_x I don't what to know what that makes my original fiction be. Doesn't matter. This story renewed my need to write and reminded me that one is supposed to have fun with the characters in the process. So that's precisely what I'm going to do now. Thank you and happy new year!

PS: It's been a while since you have published the last line of this chapter... Still feeling ready for a bit of RP? There: 'Why does going back to Valinor without dying is still frightening when you know that you will keep your memories and met all your lost relatives?'

Why did the gas drown him? Isn't it supposed to work as it would on a man?

My... this is beyond horrible. Congratulations, you've written a...serious tragedy I...feel depressed. After the boat destruction, the two blondes horrible death, the plea, the slavery, the almost rape, now the dissection. Are you trying to make me ashamed of being human?
Kidding... No but seriously? xD

Fine descriptions and a transporting tale for a good chapter.

Some questions were pertinent, others not, but both realist for a female fan to ask.
I think I will learn a lot from your writing. When I see the amount of research and-or culture you have on European History, I feel like a lazy lazy author. Damn I am not sure I can call myself an author at all. And I am supposed to be an idealist perfectionist. ...
Damn! X)

PS: I am prone to constructive envy when reading something good so don't pay attention. Just hope it will give me a kick strong enough to get back to writing seriously. ;)

This was a great story skillfully implemented into Arda... I don't have much to say except that I'm impressed by your research.

I have little to say beside that the story grows more serious and the writing more consistent as the author's knowledge and opinions are hinted at. Well, I think I'm going to read everything you've written all over the internet after that...

I began reading as a critic I turned a simply curious reader midway and irremediably ended a desperate fangirl of your writing style (it's dynamic, humor, tempered cynicism, and simplicity won me over so fast I didn't understand what happened until I felt suddenly worried this was a one-shot - how glad I was to find there was in fact many other chapters... But enough said: I love this style.

On a more rational level, (a few minutes after stopping reading) I remember that there was a plot inconstancy somewhere... ah yes: A woman inviting a nameless bum into the loft where she lives alone is a little like begging to be mugged, raped and murdered.
But it's only a fanfiction and the tone is light and humorous so this doesn't matter. :]

Wow, any question at all? Uhhh. Did you ever meet any of the Peredhil (Elured, Elurin, Elrond, Elros)? If so what were they like as people

Great story Fifi

He can't be dead, he can't be dead - oh, a coma. Nooooo!

But I'm so glad Grimvoice and Co got what they deserved.

That song - so sad - I want music to it. I don't know if I can really do it justice, but may I try?

Ooh! Somewhat grisly, but I couldn't stop reading - and I would hate to have missed that part of the story. :)

I like that it take bear tranquillisers to knock him out!

Did he fake that he was drowning? How could he do that?

This made me cry it was such a unique and beautifully written story ;'( If i could ask him anything it would be...when are you going to wake up? I really hope she doesn't have to wait for him to wake up for too long...

wow... i can't believe it's over... such a sad ending...

I like this story. I'm sorry poor David is in a coma, but I can understand why he would not wish to awaken.

Wow. This chapter was more poignant than I can put into words. Simply amazing.