this is an amazing, amazing story. you have so perfectly captured Faye's inner struggle with her lost memory that even people who hate Faye could sympathize with and understand her. i especially love the last line--"She would die as Faye, with a past, Valentine." and one other--"'I am Faye Valentine'. Cue the smile." and "because one day she would recognize that hair and that face of that girl with those green eyes filled with tears that weren't hers." you are more than a writer, you're an artist. this story rocks my world. just thought you'd like to know.

~Faye

this one-shot, besides being incredible and very insightful, has one of the best last lines i've ever read. you rock. in all the best connotations of the word.

This is such a poetic story! I love the cadence of your writing; there's a beautiful fluidity between the choice of words and the imagery. "Mommy Betrayal and Daddy Debt" is a particular favourite, as well as when you refer to Faye as "Old Las Vegas". It's the mark of a very good writer when a story continues to be engaging without necessarily including things that are a part of already accessible material (no space ships needed for this piece, for example). Splendid indeed! :)

Very good. That isn't what I figured Faye would be thinking. It adds another dimension to her personality. I'm a broken record, I know, but very good.

You capture the haziness of not remembering anything but her name so well, the confusion and the whole emotional spectrum...great work.

Nice Story. More people should review it. I really liked it.

Very good. I was quite impressed. Loved the one shot. Keep up the good work. ^.^

.: Ellie :.

Good job. A little rambly, but that may serve to introduce Faye's rather disjointed state of mind at the moment. I like how her gun is just one more thing in her duffel, like a toothbrush. That's our Faye...

some really fantastic imagery in there... great read

Very nice.
Written very nice, almost professionally. ;)
Keep writing

Really excellent insight into her character! The tone you took telling this story was perfect for the content. Exudes her desperation. Awesome work. This helps me understand Faye a lot more.