wow good story! please continue

i wanted to read this, i really did. i even started to - but gave up before i could finish the first chapter. it's just that i got so frustrated over the errors in grammar and punctuation. you should really proofread your work before you post. maybe your next fic won't be half as bad. (",) good luck

Dude Catherine and Warricks baby

Very good. The quotations are great, and much easier to read. Thank you! This chapter seemed much more put together than the others. I think that you are doing a WONDERFUL job, so keep up the good work.

Alex

This story has promise. You have a good plot and some good details, but you should really proof read it before posting to correct grammatical errors. (It can be very difficult to read and very frustrating to the reader when things run together.) Quotation marks should be used when someone is talking. A beta reader would work great for you. Most fic writers have one. If you need one, I'd be more than happy to do it for you. Just let me know. My email is triple_rocks@yahoo.com

I do think that the story is good though. I'm a multi shipper, but I'm not that big on Grissom/Sara, but I totally love Warrick/Catherine. I hope you post the next chapter soon.

Alex

I began to read this story but I gave up. You're in dire need of grammar lessons. Quotations are extremely helpful for the reader. Think about it.

Please make him okay, we already had one death in this story. I like Warrick please dont kill him.

I really like the story, thugh there are punctuation problems. other than that, good.