great series please continue im dying to know how it goes please its one of the greatest things i have read! Actually it is the greatest thing IS have ever read so im beging you to continue

Good story so far, and I really like the plot idea. Dark TK and Kari is hard to write, but you do it great!

interesting chapter, I like the mystery of the prophecy

Hey Bob, this is a really good story. Wish it hadn't been Sora with matt though in that chapter. I hate that pairing. Can just about handle Takari coz it is kinda sweet. Love the way you've made the characters. They're not OOC and I kinda like a dark T.K. too. The thought of his Crest of Hope changing to despair as one person said. Can use that well I'm sure. Anyways I hope to see more added soon.

good job

I realy love this fic! keep going, and you were doing great with the fast updates. and In my opinyon a year is realy to long.

Well, as two sayings go: If you can't beat 'em (Although they already did), join 'em. And another one that isn't really a saying: People like to play the side of the light, it's just that the dark side is much more fun, there are no behavioural rules to follow to be evil. I did notice the sword in the dream, and I'm glad you liked my ideas. I don't have any ones for you right now, what with writing my own Kingdom Hearts fic, but if I think of any I'll PM you.

May the Grace of the Valar Protect You.

glad you updated this, I really was waiting for a new chapter :)

one thing I never understood in your summary was that ? symbol after the PataGato word, you put in [] the pairings like this [Takari, PataGato?] does that means there's gonna be a love triangle or something in the digimon side or the ? symbol is like asking something? ^^;

about this new chapter was really good, Is really interesting the telepathy talks between TK and Kari, man they sure are becoming evil.

Update soon, keep up the good work :)

This is a excellent andd a really interesting chapter update.

New review because I already reviewed chapter 11. All I want to say is that I'm okay with the TK and Kari sex stuff, but just wierded out with the Patamon & Gatomon sex. Just cut it back unless you have something planned for those two like Gatomon getting pregnant or something. Also I would like to put a word in for the powers of darkness that Kari and TK have. I believe that TK should wield a longsword made out of black steel that fires a beam of dark purple out during a slash much like Andromon's Lightning Blade. I believe this attack should be called something along the lines of 'Eternal Despair'. Kari should wield a black bow and use black arrows called 'Dark Shot' I know that one was corny, but Kari could also use her powers of darkness to make her TK Pata and Gato invisible so she could shoot 'em in the back, while TK could just strike fear and terror into their hearts.

One last possibly redeeming note for Kari and TK assuming they will ever turn back to the light:

--A veil of darkness can shroud the brightest light, just as a facade of light can disgiuse the pitchest night--

This is really good and malicious story. I can't wait for an update, and I would really like to see how Kari and Takeru decieve the rest of the DigiDestined at the Kamiya residence (Yes I watch the American version. They explain things about the world and the prophecies and everything much better in that version. Plus they also use 'Digi' a whole lot more. None of that 'chosen' or 'Agumon changes to Greymon' stuff).

BlackGatomon-LadyDevimon-Lilithmon;dark crest:Lust
Lilithmon is the "Demon Lord" of lust the same Daemon is the one to Wraith, there is one for each of the seven deadly sins.

OF COURSE THAT IS VERY GOOD.
IM TOTALLY ACORDING WITH NTfoemy BUT ID LIKE TO SAY THAT BECAUSE TK AND KARY ARE EVIL, KARY IS THE DARKNESS AND OBVIUSLY SHE HAD TO SHOW CONTROL OVER TK AND OVER OTHER PEOPLE LIKE ZOMBIES OR VAMPRES THAT WILL CAUSE CAOS AND THAT CAN MAKE THE DIGIDESTINED TO THINK IN OTHER THINGS THAT DOESENT INVOLVE TK & KARY.

Oh my Lord.

Okay, here's my review for Chapters 7 through 11.

Well...the gratuitous sex scenes were out of place enough in the Digimon universe. T.K. and Kari going at it was bad enough, but Patamon and Gatomon? In lurid detail? Dear GOD, my eyes. My beautiful eyes. Very few stories in the Digimon section have made me more uncomfortable than that. If that's what you were going for, congratulations; you've achieved it with flying colors. Go celebrate. I, meanwhile, am going to stay hunched over the toilet bowl for a while.

Also dubious (though not nearly as graphic) is Matt and Gabumon getting drunk and vomiting, the transformation of T.K. and Kari into agents of darkness. At least that's what you SAY is happening; all I can see so far is that they're having sex and stuff. Seriously. This story should be called "Avatars of Horniness." I really would not be surprised to see T.K. and Kari systematically begin seducing every other member of the Digidestined, Digimon included. It's getting that ridiculous. Not that I want to give you ideas.

No, this is not a flame, but frankly, the story is annoying me more and more the longer it goes. I'm not sure if I'll be able to read any more of this one, but if mangling and/or neglecting the Digimon characters and their personalities is what makes you happy, then by all means, continue.

Hello, Lunarian. I've read this story up to Chapter 6 so far, and I have to say that the dialogue is better than what I've seen from you previously. In some cases, though, it seems like you're trying TOO hard to make it suit the characters (in Izzy's case, especially; even he wouldn't talk like that). In T.K. and Kari's case, it's an opposite problem; I can't imagine half of this stuff coming out of their mouths under any conceivable circumstances. ("The reward is much the fuller?" Oh, for crying out loud.)

Also remember...

1. When something is expressed as a question, that sentence should end with a question mark.

2. Remember to use consistent capitalization (no offense, but it's all over the place) and names (for example, it's less distracting if you choose one name--Izzy or Koushiro--and stick with it).

What's especially strange is that the first chapter is the best by a considerable margin, and it involves no dialogue at all. The capitalization was very good, the sentence structure was passable, and the story was introduced in a compelling fashion. But, as far as I can see, the following chapters have not quite lived up to that intro.

Then we come to the plot. T.K. and Kari going down on each other like that (almost, anyway) seems extremely out of character. I guess that's the point, as you're trying to skew both characters to the side of darkness or something. Interesting, but I don't find it especially appealing, and it's all happening a little too fast.

"Yikes! T.K. and Kari have been reduced to two horny teenagers spouted dialogue from an airport romance novel!"
"Yikes! Angemon and Angewomon are suddenly turning black for some reason!"
"Yikes! Izzy is trying to kill them!"
"Yikes! They've both been incapacitated by some mysterious disease!"
"Yikes! T.K. and Kari are suddenly ghost...like...things that can communicate telephathically!"

Thankfully, Daemon appeared to explain everything, but there's no way he's actually going straight with them on this "deal" or whatever it is. I find it hard to believe that T.K. and Kari would want to get revenge on their friends even then.

Anyway, I'll leave another review for chapters 7 through 11.