Nice Story! I loved reading

Um...bitter green tea, it's not really "Crutacious" it's "Cruciatus" curse. So you were wrong. And anyway, the characters are a bit OOC, particularly Draco, I find him too kind in this fic. But I really, actually, I'm obsessed with DracoxHermione so try to make some more.

cool i hope Danika and harry get together

aww! this was cute

ok...yeah, it was short. and a bit rushed in some places... you definatly could have used more details...but otherwise OK. And tell Bitter Green Tea to go get a few packs of Equal or some REAL plain sugar... and to cool it on the Caffine (Yes, there is Caffine in Green tea. That's probably what makes it so dang bitter. And ppl wonder why I don't drink it...)

AH SO MANY FLAWS... I'm so sorry that I have to point this out. I admit I haven't even finished reading this, probably because I'm too impatient to read. Anyways...
1. Dumbledore would never make someone stay in their dorm and say he can't risk it. Everyone knows Dumbledore is always there to save the day, and he knows everything. (Don't ask me how or why, it's how JK makes him)
2. For some reason, it's impossible to imagine Harry callin a girl hot. Basicly, saying that kind of lowers a girl, but he would call her "beautiful"
3. I'm very doubtful that Draco and Hermione would ever fall for each other, especially so quickly. Remember? Hermione punched Draco in the face in book 3. Draco is greedy and only thinks of himself (and well his family). He definitly does not want to be with, or even near a "mudblood" because in one of the books, he hands something to Hermione and rudely requests for her to becareful not to touch her, because he didn't want to get "contaminated"
4. I'm sure Draco would hate his sister if that ever happened.
5. Draco is extremely jealous of the "trio" because they all have something he doesn't. Ron has pride and friendship, Harry has "fame" and a scar, and Hermione has brains. In result, Draco insults them because of his jealousy for being poor, having an "ugly" scar, and muggle-born. Under no circumstances will Draco let himself be bossed about by a GIRL he hasn't seen in years and let her be with Harry, or anywhere near him.
6. I'm sure she loves her father.
7. She'd probably go to Hogwarts, you don't really hate all that much when you're 10-11ish.
8. If the very high chance of Draco and Hermione and Harry and Draco's sister (forgot her name, it's confusing.. lol), Ron would be extremely jealous. Remember in book 4, Krum becomes fond of Hermione, and before that Ron LOVED Krum, then he began to hate him, because he was getting all this attention from Hermione. I'm sure Ron would hate Hermione forever if she went near him.
Well that's all, I guess... I hope you don't take any of this personally and maybe it'll help you out for the next Harry Potter FanFic you write.

YEAH! I'm so happy about the sequel..i cant wait!! This story was good...but i'm glad it was short..cuz like its like a filler story for me..haha, thats sounds mean but sorry--i DONT lie..mwahhaa!! anyways..great job!

Aw...
YES! Accepting Reality 2 is coming! YAY!

O_O
oh... MORE PLZ!

i have to say that i agree with everything green tea is saying. with wirk maybe this could work. but it has't had the work. very, very OOC, for everyone. very mary0sue for Danika.

-It's 'Crutacious' since you asked.
-Goodbye is one word.
-The end seems to be rushed (since the sentences are more abrupt). Basically, it feels like I'm reading an outline of the fic since it is made up of one sentence paragraphs.
-Just a note; 'your' is possessive (Ex. Your cat)
whereas 'you're' means 'you are'. I noticed that you mixed those two up duting your lovely response to my review.
-Never put author's notes in the middle of the fic. It throws the readers off. Try putting an asterix or a superscript and adding a foot note instead.

cool... excllent... are some of the words that can describe this chappie but... if you would have made the battle to be more dramatic... you know... even though the story kinda doesn't center in harry... the last fight would be a good chappie to portray him. Well, it was good nonetheless. Update soon! Ciao, Alannah

So..someone else said the spell that killed Ol' Volde? Not Harry...right? oh well, good chapter..but a bit predictable that Voldemort died. Can't wait to see how you end it!!

It's cool!

wow! that was one hell of a fight! ::laughs at Harry:: sorry, i think Potter is a dork, so don't mind me. it's just kind of funny that he went through all of that trouble and he didn't even get to kill Voldie Moldie! i though Potter was very winey in the fifth book so i like to make fun of him now. anyway, this was such an awesome chapter. poor Hermion! will she be okay? what about Danika? i know, i know. you can't tell me these things, but that's what the next chapter is for. sorry about your dad stealing your adaptor. i'm not on good terms with my ahem, father either. at least you'll be going off to college, so you'll be free of them forever... man, now i'm depressed! i still have a good five years before i can get out of here! damn! oh well, please update very soon. you had meworried there for a while when yo didn't update as quickly as you usually do.

Me,

Ali