i liked this... i wish the church acctually took care of the preists you did those horrible things.

I suppose it's not difficult to write in character when the characters are flat. Taking into account that this is only a short one-shot, I'll give you points for uniqueness, and for at least keeping the (iscariot) characters from going angsty. But other than that, the story and the characters, even Darrow, lacked depth and believability. There are ways to write a short story without excluding important aspects, most importantly character depth. But it's up to you if you want to put the effort into developing your writing at all.

Holy **!

Write some more. Write more then the dumbasses. The earth needs more intelligent people like you. Keep it up.

DON'T format your hard drive.

I see you posted. Good grief and a relief of the crap posted here (A/S and Mary Sues. Ew). Wonderful, IC and well-written one shot. Yay for Iscariot love!