interesting

I think this is the fic i like best among all those you have written heh. The poetic style is so very pretty, and I like your allusions to the demon king and whatnot.

You're the best writer I've seen on FF yet, I think :DD

I can't say I really got it, but the writing was poetic and beautiful and THAT I can appreciate :) Really wonderful! Amber

vauge, but thats what makes it yours.

keep writing, whether it be here or not. :]

So many metaphors ran past my mind I was only able to let a small amount of your words keep from falling through the gaps of my fingers.

Beautiful, though. Simply.

Dude I dunt get it! JK JK. I do. This is wonderful, and so is Burial of the Dead. Reading these made me read the wasteland and in turn opened up my creatvity. I think it's interesting that you chose Sango and Kohaku for A Game of Chess, but I can understand. To openly interpert this I can easily associate Kohaku with the poet-protagonist, while Sango is the female lead asking questions, "Why do you never speak? Speak." I really hope you come back and do the rest. I'd love to see someone become the Fisher King. Bleh.. not to get all academic on you. It's really good though. I really liked when you had an addition chapter with footnotes to explain. That's as close as I'll go towards criticism. Bring the footnotes back!

i didn't get it

ah, Silvia Plath rises to the surface like a great fish... (mirror) a clever, indirect way to pen incest!

...i'm speechless... it was truly beautiful and the idea of incest was perfectly written... it touch me deeply and i can say that you have a great talent to compose beautiful story

in fact it is the first kohaku/sango fanfiction that i read and i'm truly happy to have take this one

Bravo!

C'était magnifique!

Very... dark. And confusing.

Hm... I must not be a well-ready person. This one didn't really make any sense to me. Now I'm feeling like a fiction simpleton...

In the room the women come and go/Talking of Michaelangelo...

I can see why you sensed a connection between the characters and Prufrock. I like that you were inspired by the poem and yet you made this very much your own.

There is a real sense of longing, things unable to be spoken and the question of whether or not one really has the courage to face the truth. Or should one say, "That is not what I meant at all. That is not it, at all."

Sorry for rambling. I hope you could understand my rather poor attempt at criticism (that is of course Lit crit).

Um,

well...

that was certainly original.

very deep...must read it again...

The concept of incest is rather disturbing, yet befitting I guess. Keep in time open mind right? Anywho-though the actual use of Sango and Kohaku was vague, the use of text from The Waste Lands which I find a strange choice of inspiration, but I can see how it has influenced the way you write, it shows what sort of er.. genre you are into (dont think that genre was the right word, but whatever). Well, it was nice.

This is cultivated angst beyond my wildest dreams. Dear God, what have you done to my mind.