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| Rikku-just-in-4-a-sec 2005-03-14 ch 1,  | abuseaww 2 cute |
| Elion 2005-01-13 ch 9, | abuseplease, please, please write more. PLEASE |
| skyhopper 2004-12-08 ch 10, | abuseyeah i hope in the next chapter they kick seymours **! hahaha lol jk but yeah let there be some ** kicking.xD I really like ur story especially the rikku and gippal fluff hah of course. |
| Elion 2004-09-08 ch 10, | abusesuch a GREAT story!1 UPDATE SOON!!11DO IT |
| Rikku-just-in-4-a-sec 2004-08-13 ch 10, | abuseow i like this story! hey more plz ur such a good writer plz more plz! plz ow i love it! |
| Blue Dragon X 2004-08-02 ch 1, | abuse. . . Uh, you were mad about your stories being deleted. I wanted to tell you that ff.net doesn't do it, an author that reads it anonymously reports them. Just wanted to warn you. |
| kingleby 2004-07-11 ch 1, | abusethat was so cute ^_^ bless rikku! |
| SaloManiac 2004-07-10 ch 9, | abuseTransition = a scene change. From Djose to the Celsiu, for example. |
| punkygal 2004-07-04 ch 9, anon. | abusethis chapter was gd...evil cid lol.. and no im not lying ^_^ |
| deityofdeath69 2004-06-28 ch 9, anon. | abuseug.ug es y meddma luhnicat, cu neggi ec ug huf nekrd?. dryd ec fryd e druikrd yht kebbym ec ib ghuf?,e tihhu pid drec ec y knayd vel yht es mujeh ed...TRANSLATION:ok.ok blah blah blah...i like this ficcy alot so keep updaten! ^_^* |
| SaloManiac 2004-06-27 ch 1, | abuseI must say, to start this review, that I do enjoy the story, though it unfortunately seems a bit rushed. The changes in places (i.e Bikanel/Djose/Celsius) Occurs in the same block of text, so I suggest that you find some delicate way of separating parts of your chapters with something more visible than just hitting enter twice. This is an example, a.k.a the thing I use. (++) This line separates 'scenes' meaning for example, the transition from, let's say Zanarkand and Celsius. Oh. Don't rush your way through each chapter. Readers can wait. You have to please yourself with your story, before pleasing readers. (BTW: Machina have arms. At least some of 'em do.) -Ultimate Xdeath- |
| punkygal 2004-06-27 ch 9, anon. | abuseaww great chapter i love dis story it so sad tho... |
| nobody-hearts-2 2004-06-27 ch 9, | abuseyay! rikku didnt die! i wuv you! hahaha lol anyways please hurry up and update! ive been waiting so long for this chapter! i really wanna know what happens next! please contiue!...anyways i have to go now, BYE! |
| John Allerdyce 2004-06-24 ch 8, | abuseThis is great! |
| nobody-hearts-2 2004-06-22 ch 8, | abuseomg! Please continue! i must know what happens! you know! Well, this is a great story! i must know what happens! I must i must! Please hurr and update! i really wanna know what happens! Well i have to go bye! |