It was...alright. The only problem with the story is that it is way to short. There isn't even enough time to get into the story. You could have at least waited a few days before Sora decided to show himself. And why didn't he just come up to her instead of writing scribbled notes. And why did Riku lie about Sora? If you restart you could turn this seven hundred word bedtime story into a twenty-thousand word novel. I'm not saying I don't like it you just should have consentrated more on giving it an actual storyline.

O.L.A.D.

It was very kawaii! It touched me soo...*wipes tear* Just like The Phantom of the Opera...(Dang, that movie's so sad and romantic!)

Goofy: *sobbing* I-can't...BELIEVE you talked me into watching that movie! *sob sob*

Me: *hands Goofy tissue* Oh, get over it you big crazy lug!

Goofy: *Looks at Soras Angel* I liked the story, but...WHERE ARE DONALD AND I?!! I DO see good ol' King Mickey there, though! *blows nose real loud*

Me: DON'T LISTEN TO HIM SORAS ANGEL! It's a wonderful story!

Goofy: *still blabbering about The Phantom of the Opera* So...sad! *sob*

Me: *pats his back* 'S okay Goofy, s' okay...*rolls eyes* Well, once again great story! I'm out!

Goofy: *sob*

cool! and i thought sora was dead! and it was all just a dream

For someone who doesn't write romance, it's really good. It went a bit quickly, but it's still really good.

And by the way, her name is spelled 'Kairi'. Just so you know ^^

WOW this story is very good it is one of the best ones i have ever read...i haven't read that many...but still. One of my friends told me to read it you probably know her...Juzlovnsora yea. Well great story your writing technique needs to be improved a little but this story is overall very good. Well Bye Bye

~Lil Angel-Gurl

hiya so this is your first story? right? I am so happy that you are going to be working on stories now yay!! Whenever you write a story i will read it, and if you want me to edit it i will. But that is up to you. Well awesome story, it could use some work but this is only your 1 story. Oh and change the format to kinda like how i do it. Because you are supposed to have a new paragraph when someone else speaks. Well B~bye

~*Me