...That was amazingful. Not a lot of authors can pull off a poem like that, but you managed it beautifully! *grins maniacally* I've never really liked either Eol or Aredhel, but this poem brings them both to life. Sort of ironic, when they both died in tragic ways. Oh well.

Vana, this was wonderful!

Well, I didn't understand it at all, cause I'm not a Sil reader, but it was beautiful.

*applause* I'm always edgy about strictly rhyming poems because it's easy to make them hokey, but this steered clear of that, and I really enjoyed it. I loved the form, and repetition of "Lord" and "Lady." Really a lovely poem. Good luck in the Mithril Awards.

*Wipes tear* This was written so beautifully I nearly cried. Maeglin is my favourite of the Silmarillion characters & I just love the story of how he came to be because his parents are just so different in so many aspects. Absolutely lovely! Words cannot express.

This poem is worthy of recognition & if J.R.R Tolkien were alive I know he would think it too. :D

Banshee Queen.

"Oh, safe was the vale, and kind was the Lord,

And the Lady she lay down to rest;

For sweet was her heart, and content her soul,

And to stay there she thought it was best."

I'm something of an Eol fan (he's misunderstood, violent and a bit mad, like all my favorite Elves), so I was delighted to see that part. Eol did love her, he just never figured out what that meant.

You did a great job with the form; it really is a ballad. I found myself tapping out a rhythm as I read. This could be sung - to some dark, haunting tune, of course.

My goodness, this is so beautiful! You put to poetry a tale that always leaves me sad. The imagery was incredible, the word choice simple perfect - in short, a work of art! I always felt bad for what happened to Eol and Aradhel, because Eol wasn't evil - he loved her. It was a complicated misunderstanding. But this...this is a perfect tribute to them. Great job!

Avie

This makes me just want to sit here and rock back and forth, and back and forth, and...

Brilliantly done. I'm a fan of free verse, but only because most people can't pull something like this off. Kudos (bars) to you yet again!

Vana

Well, I'm not a Silm-head and so I've not commented on most fo your stuff, but I fancy that I can comment on the form of this piece if not the essence.

I definitely like the flow of this one. Though I don't quite fancy the repetitive use of "Oh" to start the stanza. I can see what it does in your scheme and it does keep the meter and the rhythm well... but the repetition seem a bit overmuch, imo.

Overall, still a nice piece!

W

This is beautiful, and it just flows. I love it! **adds to favourites** Do you know of anyone who writes quality Turin Turambar fics? J/W...

A perfect poem. It's good that you added a line about Eol's (I can't type accents on my computer very easily) fairness, as so many people think that because he's a 'Dark Elf', he is, literally, dark.

Have you submitted this to HASA? Just wondering.

Anyway, it was very well done, and certainly one of the nicest bits of poetry I've read in a long while.

Also, thank you for reviewing 'To Look Upon It Once'.

Oh how lovely! I typically shy away from poetry at , but this piece shows me how wrong I have been to do this! I am not overly familiar with the Simarillion, but I still greatly enjoyed the story and the flow of the words. I expect I will return to this poem often :)

Brilliant. I wish my first drafts turned out this way! (And huzzah for having joined Parma!)I especially love the line, "And his fate his son saw last" - hidden meanings are spiffy. Write on!

Absolutely loved it! It flowed so effortlesly that I read through it without drawing breath.

Oh no! I didn't mean it could be told exclusively to young elflings in Gondolin (can you imagine that?)! I merely meant young elflings in general. After all, it was a part of the history of the Eldar, be it a rather dark one.

your meter and rhyme is exquisite.. i wish i could do that. i like how in the beginning stanzas, the 1st 2 lines was about the Lady, nad the other 2 about the Lord. i love, "fair was her heart, and trusting her soul, And naught of deception she knew." and how she laughed no more in the woods. u tell teh story so well, without once mentioning their names. very very good.