Reviews for Saviour, Conqueror, Hero, Villain

Reviews For: Saviour, Conqueror, Hero, Villain - Reviews: Page 1 of 9

Gabzalabza 2008-03-30 ch 12,	abuseI rather liked this one too. I read ur other version w/ Rev and Mal and (if u havent noticed) i posted them in my bio as a 2nd fav fic (soz u lost out to something else i think). But i like how u did this one, too. I was a little disappointed w/ Carth's death in the alternate ending, but u can't have everything and it kinda fit w/ Rev turning to the Dark Side and Dus joining the Jedi (i liked that idea btr than him joining Rev after his father dies.) The first ending WAS my fav, however, mainly cause im either a Carth or Canderous fan. Also, totally evil characters don't really tickle my fancy. I like neither totally light or totally dark. A nice balance is good like the MRevan got in ur other Fic. Anyways, Love it. luv ya Gabzalabza
MrEmperor 2008-03-09 ch 12,	abuseImpressive.
MrEmperor 2008-03-09 ch 1,	abuseNice start!
a Fan 2008-01-31 ch 9, anon.	abuseThe way I see it letting someone live is not a weakness. It there is no purpose in their death is an advantage cannot be gained from it then is is mearly an act of sadism not strengh.
Vespera 2007-12-26 ch 12,	abuseVery interesting alternate universe. You pulled together a compelling story, with an absorbing interpretation of the conflicts Revan explores throughout the story. In particular, I liked the various forms of honor explored in this story, and how Revan was conscripted to help the Jedi due to her powerful sense of honor. I had wondered what would compel the Dark Lord to knowingly cooperate with the Jedi throughout the events of the game, but her sense of honor, coupled with her intimate bond with Bastila, worked very well. Also, a very nice interpretation of Dustil, a powerful combination of dark skill and lingering compassion. Nice use of his character in this story. Just one element that I thought could've been polished: Revan's "snarky **" mode. I too found it annoying that the "dark" responses throughout the game were of the "brutal thug" variety, and I'd hoped this story would remedy that. But Revan just struck me as too crude and vulgar to be the intimidating, inspiring Sith Lord in her prime. Yes, she was powerful, and her abilities were captured nicely, but the constant perverse humor, greed, and swearing reflected behaviour much closer to the lower ranks of the Sith than an empress. Again, the game did lead us in the direction of a "dark" Revan being something of a thug, but in the context of the game, her memories and skills were largely lost. In this story, Revan remembered everything. Sure, you can show her vulnerability and susceptibility to compassion - the core of her character development - but she could've been more dignified. Like all the high-level Sith we saw in the game and films. It just felt weird that, in a story filled with angst, that there was so much "sniggering" going on.
Prozak 2007-12-15 ch 5,	abuseHonestly, reading so far I need to suggest that you find a good first person book to look at how yours can be improved, since I don't write first. I can see that there's a lot left to be desired with what I read from you, mostly because it feels listless... lifeless. The passion and strong narrator voice that makes first person possible isn't here. In fact, I could go so far to say that if you replaced all the I's, we's and me's in this story with the third-person parallels, no one would be the wiser. I'm sorry, but that's a fair assumption on my part. I've read proper first person before, but I can't explain it, so read it yourself and compare. John Irving is a master of first person, try him. Yours ideas are good though. I like them a lot. You can improve on them even more with a larger vocabulary... I think I read the word "ferally" as a descriptive for smiling so much that I permanently hate the word. Thanks a lot. :P
Triggerhappy Sniper 2006-05-15 ch 12,	abuseWicked
Lord_Firis 2006-04-16 ch 12, anon.	abuseWoW.I mean what can I say? This was one of the best story,fic,etc...I've ever heard. (not to kiss your or anything). This was how I imagined a female Revan would be. You actually included everything from the game while adding some addition imagination to it, to make it sound better then I could ever picture or comprehend. I've played KOTOR many times so I know exactly what happens in the game, and what should have happened. Your story had both aspects put together quite well in a form of an amazing story. I truly had a pleasure reading this story. and hope you continue with it on both the light and the dark side. I personally am a big fan of the darkside, so you can picture my enjoyment when you made your female Revan dark and vicous yet in a respectful way, rather then in a spiteful way. I also liked how you added Dustil Onasi as a part of the Ebon Hawk crew. In addition, I liked how you altered the limitation on how many party members can accompany you when you leave the Ebon Hawk, and how each party member reacted and responded as they were portrayed in KOTOR. i.e. how mission didn't liked being called a kid,how Canderous was strictly courage and honor, how Carth was a blind who didn't trust anyone, how Bastila was a spoiled Jedi brat, etc... Like I said before it really was an honor reading the story. Not just cause it was a good story but how you understood the true aspect of KOTOR and Revan. (I mean this when I say that) This should be a movie, because i'd definentely go see it.
Just a friendly advice... 2006-01-21 ch 1, anon.	abuse''I am a 22 year old with the IQ of a 36 year old, but the physical appearance and emotional age of a 12 year old.'' You should really remove this from your bio. It makes you sound terribly arrogant and Mary Sue-ish.
Robbie the Phoenix 2005-11-03 ch 12,	abuseBrilliant fic. I really enjoyed both your lightside and your darkside endings, and I liked the way you did the replicating as well.
Admiral Albia 2005-07-10 ch 4,	abuseOkay, so I'm reading all your stuff again. I'm pathetic :p Having just finished FFY, I noticed this line... "'if I'd used claws then, instead of today... instead of my lightsaber...'" Is she referring to Malak? Or is it a retroactive connection that you didn't intend at the time?
Kara Ay 2005-04-29 ch 12,	abuseI'm not an experinced writer.But still your both Ds and Ls ending hit a nerve...I don't know why i was bothered by Ls ending.Maybe the fact Revan was still a fugitive.You don't need to know my Ds opinion but i will tell you something.There's a drunk guy in the Tatooine cantina who babbles.And in the game with Ls male revan, i used Force to make him shut up but even that bothered me...So you can imagine why i didn't like Ds ending...What i'm trying to say is i was hoping that Revan would be redeemed(not a jedi puppet,of course). Generally,your story is well-written and good plotted.So i liked it(except the endings).And i had liked 'Revan's Second Chance' too. I wish you writer's luck.:D
Dinah Lance 2005-04-20 ch 12,	abuseI just came across this story the other day, and I was lucky enough to have the time to rip right through the whole thing. Awesome. Writing a Light Side Revan tale makes characterization a real challenge. How do you reconcile a good Revan with Darth Revan? You've done it by simply making her not good. I love it! It takes away all of the angst and brings it back down to earth (or Dantooine or whatever planet). She's so delightfully bitchy. I love how she tells Carth her real name right off the bat. And when she reveals to the Council that she knows who she is? Priceless. And yet I found her (quasi-)redemption totally believable. Though I have to say, I found Carth's death scene in the alternate ending to be a really moving moment. And when he speaks to Juhani and Jolee after his death? Fantastic. Thanks very much for a unique twist and a well-developed story.
Lauren K 2005-03-08 ch 12,	abuseYay! A happy ending! Death, destruction and a large bowl of porridge! ...Ahem. I did like this last chapter. I'm always a fan of seeing the less explored side of a story, and the evil character's stories are never really covered by anyone... My only slight problem was the complete lack of Canderous in this chapter, apart from "You're Revan and I'll follow you anywhere..." But that's just personal bias speaking. Great fic. Keep up the good work!
Tricksy Kitsune 2005-02-25 ch 1,	abuseAn excellent read and truly a thoroughly refreshing twist from the usual renditions of the storyline. Revan's character is developed nicely - I was surprised at how well you pulled off her dark and light shifts, so kudos for that. :D Characters reacted appropriately to situations... the way you wrote out Dustil really surprised me, but pleasantly so. Other things of note: your 'alternate uses' for Dark Side powers - not JUST for every day carnage; Revan's definition of Sith being different from the blood-thirsty pack of kath hounds spreading slaughter across the galaxy; Admiral Dodonna's reaction on the Rakata homeworld, as well - many fics deal with the fact that for Revan, even after the Star Forge is destroyed and Malak is dead, the galaxy isn't going to forgive her - you dealt with this effectively without the angst of millions of assassination attempts on her person ;D Lastly I'd really like to lavish praise on the fact that of all the Revan/Carth fics I've read (and that's a lot...), this rendition with Revan, as a dark-sider, knowing who she is, feels the most natural. Never once did they feel rushed, did their reactions to one another seem unnatural. You really did them justice, and for that I have to bow. Only gripe I can toss out, was I saw a lot of 'said flatly' from Revan - usually I wouldn't point out something that minute, but it was borderline deja vu each time I saw it after a while. Aside from that mild nitpick, great story!

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