The opening scene was VERY tender; a great, wonderfully depicted moment that was VERY much in character! Clever and nicely done! The ending was pretty spiff, too. Fine writing, nice job! Thank you.

And all is right with the world again. A happy conclusion to a great story. Thanks for the fast update!

Pretty decent. It took me awhile to get into it. Maybe I was having problems adjusting to the pacing for some reason. One we had our two main members of the cast present, things really picked up. I think for me, everything came to life at this point. The dialogue kinda caught me off guard. It was good and interesting. As usual, I love how you involve the senses (with your descriptions) which enhanced my reading. Thank you.

Loved it, loved it, loved it. As I read over Query's straight-talking, I couldn't help wishing that something almost verbatim be delivered to a certain arachnophile over in the NW comic. That's the thing with great fanfic. We read it and think "why are so many of the authors on FF.net better writers than the ones DC is paying?" Thank-you!

I like the newest chapter.

Ivy can do whatever she wants to the men, but when another lady enters the equation, bets are off. You do a great job of conveying Ivy's innate superiority complex, and simultaneous weakness whenever shes around other women.

This seemed to be a bit longer than your ususal chapters. There was certainly nothing wrong with that as there were not any wasted words or material throughout. I confess this was much better, daring and surprising than I hoped or expected. Only tiny quibble I got: how Ivy was knocked out -- kinda seemed implausibly cliched to me. However, the dues ex machina worked and what followed was a gold mine for this reader. You did a wonderful job capturing the moment and the volley between Ivy & Q. I loved Ivy's comments which showed us her POV; kinda rare that fic does that. Exceptional. The closing lines were marvelous. Also, you do a great job of setting a scene up description-wise also. I loved it. Thank you!

Great chapter. I like the title, and the "stepmother" line. I can't wait to find out what happens next!

That Chu Hua is a clever trousers, isn't she? Very astute, that one.

I liked the parallel between Eddie's and Dee's reactions to this whole situation. They're certainly made for each other. :)

I'm back...
I think I will have to go back and read the stories I missed (since the Dee/Eddie break-up was among them), but this is a very good beginning to what will be a very emotionally-charged story. Kudos to you, Query.

This was a good read. I think the use of brackets was very appropriate. I think the read was very tight in that it flowed well and I didn't see any use of words were wasted. I think you used great description and painted a visual. Thank you.

*snff* I got all teary. I've felt this way - the same way Dee does in this chapter. You convey it perfectly. I'd wish for a longer chapter, but it really was the right length. So instead, I'm eagerly awaiting the _next_ chapter.
Good Work!

Whooey...

another fantastic story.

You pace the story ideally, implying that the action is niether bland enough to cut out nor fast enough to summarize. I can hardly wait to see where this newly-savage Riddler is going!

First, I have to admit this review doesn't mean much because you had me on the tagline. That was just wonderful. You hooked me, I knew exactly the tone and wit I would find beyond the link because of it, and that's why I'm here. Well done.
Seems like such a little thing, but it's almost as important as other aspects of writing discussed around here. What good is all the structure, plotting and characterization if nobody reads it?

I loved the country music bit too, obviously, ;)

And I also loved Trigger. These aren't the usual ideas we have of rogue henchman. They're sticking with Eddie through the bad times, even to the point of risking life and limb (Trigger is a brave guy) pointing out the nutsy behavior and threatening to stuff a sandwich down his throat if the silly ** doesn't start eating.

Can't say his "This isn't what she would want" strategy is very bright though. When he's upset because she's gone, reminding him of her isn't going to make it any better, Trig. Ah well, nobody hires these guys for their brains, do they.

Then we get into the really good stuff: Eddie reflecting on their relationship. As usual, you bring a curious blend of realistic and romantic ideas to the male-female thing that is extremely rare in fanfic. I like how Eddie was aware of Dee's games and indulged her - he is too bright to have not realized. Just because he's in love, doesn't eradicate every other aspect of his character, even in relation to the lady (that is rare in fanfic too). Kudos on that.

>> If she was happy, he was happy. Simple as that.

That's sweet. That's why I'm sure these two will survive the current trials.

>> "You really think we should be getting involved in this?"

No, boys. Interfering in the boss's love life is NOT a good idea even when he's not a Gotham villain.

LOL, I can't wait to see where you're going with this.

Oh, my God. Country music, Eddie?

Anyway, I love the way you've started this one. Eddie's drunken depression is a little scary, so I hope Benny and Trigger's scheming will pay off. I'm liking those two guys more with every story!

Nice chapter. This seemed to have a crustier feel to it with the the dialogue; that really drew me in and I guess I didn't expect it. For some reason, I pictured Gorshin saying all the Riddler lines in this. Thank you.