   blueyblonde 1/14/08 . chapter 1good story |
| back off sabrina harvey's mine 11/18/04 . chapter 1 i loved it. |
| kears 9/29/04 . chapter 1 you need to revew your grammer a bit, I think...
write more... the suspence is not good... |
| C-l-A-ii-R-e-B-a-r-e 8/20/04 . chapter 1 You bet! I so wanna hear the rest! MORE MORE MORE! |
| Shian 8/21/03 . chapter 1 umm, I highly suggest taking all four of you're little ficlets and putting them together to make one, 4-chapter story. You should get a beta, someone to read the story and correct any mispelling or grammar errors and the like.
New paragrphs when people speak.
I like the dialogue so far. I may have to read the others . . . |
| Navigirl Hater 3/20/02 . chapter 1 It's me, Navigirl, the supreme leader of crazyness. I am mad at myself but i rate this story a 6. bybye |
| Gertrude Spencer 11/26/01 . chapter 1 You might want to consider breaking it up into paragraphs, it would make it easier to read. Double quotes are good things (hint). Other than that it was good reading. |
| SalemCrazy 4/27/01 . chapter 1 Short! But sweet! _ |
| casey 4/20/01 . chapter 1 awesome |
| moi 1/7/01 . chapter 1 finish the stooooooooorrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyy! |
| Daniel 12/2/00 . chapter 1 Cool cliffhanger! Can't wait for more! |
| anon 11/24/00 . chapter 1 |
| Glinting Gorrilla 11/21/00 . chapter 1 When are you going to publish the rest, I can't wait. |
| cherrypie 10/19/00 . chapter 1 very good. i need more! more! mor! write more! :- |
| Steph 9/27/00 . chapter 1 i think this is a really good story line, however have you ever thought about writing it in a script way? |
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