It's really good, I wish Jason would show his feelings even that much in the actual series! A few of the lines might need revising as they don't sound altogether as they would in an episode, but you ended it wonderfully, exactly as a real episode of Ocean Girl would end (evil cliffies!) I'd love to see you do an extra episode for the other seasons (especially the fifth, which needs improvement!) Keep it up!
Lase.

I like this story.If you decide to do a sequel, it will be interesting to see what happens next.

Cool! I like... I could totally see this as part of the syncronium series. Keep writing!

A bit hasty. Just describe as much as possible and make sure you got the spelling and "'s right. Neri's last remark is a bit out of place. Try to continue to write and finish the story with another end

Interesting... I like the Jason and Neri piece.