I really enjoyed this. It's an aspect of Hyuuga life often overlooked, rarely fully explored. The language in this suites the subject very well. Thanks for sharing.

I really loved this perspective of the Hyuuga. Don't think I ever thought of this aspect of them, or at least not so deeply. It was so stilted and claustrophobic, even the writing style mimicked the FEEL of the piece.

CRIT: I think that about 2/3 through, it was too much. The idea was interesting and the theme solid, and your writing is always a joy to read. But, I found myself wanting to skip to the end at that point, almost like you took the description too far or got to repetitive. I'm not sure exactly WHY, but I figured it was worth mentioning.

Thanks for the great read, nonetheless.

This is perfect. PERFECT. I've been trying to find a story EXACTLY like this for SO long!!

What a great read...I keep on saying good things about you...You're a such great writer. You understand fictional characters like they were yours all along. :D

"Soap and water do not work, and the effort itself of washing endlessly at the bath is always noted by Hiashi if not by the rest of the clan. Hiashi customarily mentions it over breakfast the next day, a dry line of, someone's trying another useless effort again, and then those assembled for the meal turn and look at the offender."

I just love that part. :)

Oh my gosh. This is an idea which hadn't even occurred to me, even though I've been a fan of Naruto for years. I never thought about the implications of having a clan full of people who could see through everything, and how it would affect their every day life. Wow. This was an amazing and original idea for a fic, and your writing skills are just as amazing. O_O

That's pretty cool. I like how you described that.

-Insane Slytherin

Wow. that was very... interesting.

It was good. Felt like it jumped around a little bit, but I can see what you're getting at. It's a nice introspective look at the Hyuugas, and probably true, as eerie as it is.

Thoughtful, anylitic, plausible. I like.

Hey, that was really interesting! I liked the way you talked about the different dialects of body language. Very cool. ^^

Good description of the Hyuuga world, it was worth reading. :)

what a look at the hyuuga dynamic. although i liked "farsighted" better, this was still SO amazing. a house without doors so that everything is exposed...and yet, nothing is being done to better the blatant suffering of the branch members. why can't more people write like you?!

Very interesting fic, you create a strange ambiance both poetic and implacably logical.

A very good idea for a depressing fic - so very Hyuuga.