keepitupilovecliffies

so is the child superboys or terry comon don't keep us hanging

this story realy has potentil keep it up

so is slade good or bad in this fick also please tell me the rest of titans will not stand for batman shutting down the titans i mean robin sure everyone else heck no

dude this awsome

Most people write on this site for the simple pleasure of writing,but since you say this is for a course and because I am an old fan of the Teen Titans(old and new),I'll try and give you a decent review and not just goosh over the story and tell you how much I simply like it(which I do).
It's a good novelization of a good comic series,but I'm wondering if it would be as clear to a non Titan fan?Maybe a little more character description,but you might be planning that along the way.I noticed some characters develope more strongly than others,either their your favorites or they might be more important to the storyarc itself.
uh...hm,this is tougher than I thought since I'm enjoying the story so much.The action scenes move along fairly smoothely,not too rushed or drawn out.
I'm keeping my fingers crossed that Deathstroke(or Slade as all the cartoon fans now know him) will be done well.I find the so called villians usually get the short end of the developement stick,and come out as...well...cheesey.Slade was a great character in the original comics and soon got warped and bent out of shape over the years by other writers.
I liked that he had a life,and that it was completely screwed up in its own fashion.You weren't just like,"he's bad,I don't like him",more like,"Oh...that's why he's bad...the poor slob...he's a complete bastard and I love him".
But the others are written fairly well,so I don't suppose I have to worry too much.Thanks for a nice storyline,I hope you continue to write it...and good luck with your degree course too.

You can get better from just writing a lot and reading other people's stories and not just from writing on your own and waiting for reviews.

If you're not writing this just for fun though, I think you should just forget it then.

Oh, and when you change scenes, add something inbetween the paragraphs, or add an extra space. I hate it when you just go straight into the next scene in such a way that it looks like it's just another paragraph going further from the one before.

Sometimes, especially during fight scenes, your sentences run on too long. That's my only complaint

And you're not updating any more? Oh come on, you need to!! This story is great, and I really would like to see what you do with the Titans. So don't sit on your bum and not type just because hardly anyones is reviewing, because you know what, hardly anyone does unless it's a full blown stupid comedy story, and your story is too good to be filled with stupid assed reviews. Now get back to writing!

Hmm, so far I've liked this story. Although I never read the comics, I wish I did, and everything I really know is based off that TV show and the VS. System card game. Either way, I really do like this story still, although I'm dismayed that there are 8 chapters and this hasn't been updated in a month...

☻ Hi, StarfireTT here! I am going to review the whole story so far. I love your story and I'm really sad you are going to stop writing if you don't get any reviews, so I'm reviewing! I really think you have talent and I want to find out what happens. I was really sad when I read your threat. I think killing a titan was cool and not predictable. I love how you put Terra in it. You really know how the characters are because you are making them act like they should. I think you got their personalities just right. And I'm wondering what¡¯s happening on Tamaran right now. The only things wrong are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but otherwise your story is the bomb! I'm adding your story and you to my favorites. Have you written any other stories? I'd love to read them. Sorry I wrote so much. ☻

p.s. I thought the space ship spinning in space part was cool, too! And I hope my reviewing helps you to Wright another chapter. I'll be waiting!

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☺StarfireTT☺

Got through the whole story and I like this. You've done a good job with the characterization of the Titans. I do think that killing of Tsunami was a bit premature because the reader really didn't get to know her well. If we would've known her more, her death would've meant more than moving the plot along. Interested to see how Slade is going to punish his son and how Donna deals with her pregnancy with a man that she's not in love with anymore. I'm pretty sure you're going to have Robin become Nightwing soon but how will be the big thing. And when's Arsenal coming back from that mission? Keep up the good work and have a good day.

Please can you update soon? I haven't read the comics before but I could understand your story and it's REALLY good! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

i am so so so so SO SO SO very sorry for mot reveiwing sooner!! really really really sorry!! see first, i got sick on the first day of school with a fever and then i had to make up all the stuff, and now i just plain have a lot of work to do from school. i am really sorry. anyways, this was really really interesting. i felt tsunami's death was rather premature, personally, because we hadn't really read very much of her. but it does help the plot move along. it's interesting what you have with the runaway. It's terra, yes? it adds even more to the story, and it's gettingmore complex, which is nice. ^_^ also wouldn't aqualad make an appearance in the story to express strong feelings? tsunami was his lil sis. anyways, keep up the good work and hope to read more soon. also, i can't get into your other story. it keeps saying "story not found". *confuzzled expression* hm. well, plz update soon and i will try my best to read and review and help you! good luck with everything!

Wow ^_^ I just finshed reading your story. I read the whole thing in one sitting, it took FOREVER! Its so good though I cound't tear my eyes away, you so have to write another! ^_^