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The Angry Angel
2009-05-28 . chapter 2
Good writing. I like this story mucho. The jumping from first to third person is VERY annoying and confusing. I cannot tell who Landon is married to, who to/if Relena is married, or Hilde. Otherwise, NICE story! *thumbs up*
Pureevil230
2005-10-18 . chapter 3
u can't leave it there. its not fair!

need to know more.

UPDATE SON!
JK
2004-07-19 . chapter 1
Hey! Yeah it was too short haha... I wanted to read more of it!! Lucky for me, you have chapters 1 and 2 up! I really liked how you explained the fighting scene. It was very descriptive and it keeps us readers hungering for more! KEEP IT UP! Off to the first chapter I go...

~JK~
Catalina
2004-07-16 . chapter 3
It is a great history I hope you will have time o end this amazing history
Anrui Shino
2004-07-14 . chapter 3
interesting, interesting =D. i can wait, it's ok. =). n it's ok abt the switching POVs.
Wing
2004-07-14 . chapter 3
You're doing much better with the POVs. It was a bit short though, the chapter...I was hoping to read more. I wonder what Heero's reaction will be when he finds himself in some cabin. Lolz. It should be amusing. So Relena's family supports the Confederates...but her brother is a Union soldier...I wonder if Milliardo knows Heero? Anyway, I can't wait to find out more. Keep it up and please post soon! From the ever so *sweet* and *kawaii*~Wing
raigne
2004-07-14 . chapter 3
the changing of point of view is okay but i do think it'll be better if you stick with either just one of them. it gets a bit confusing as you continue to read. goodluck on your volunteer work...i just hope you don't forget about this fic, okies?
Melodi Moon
2004-07-14 . chapter 3
Ah, I was in the middle writing a review when the stupid dictionary came up. I'm not sure if it submited the review or not. Well, I'm going to assume it didn't and start over. I like the point of view change! I didn't think that was a bad notion at all. Also, thanks for making Relena strip him. There are too many stories involving injuries in which they simply take off his shirt and pants but nothing else. It's not very realistic when they do that. I thought it was really cool the way you did it, nothing glamorous but none-the-less there. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Reboo
2004-07-13 . chapter 3
The pov change is forgiveable, although at first, I must admit it had be slightly baffled, lol, figured it out soon enough though. This is really good by the way, so I do hope you continue to post.
Saiya-jin Patricia
2004-07-13 . chapter 3
I love this story. It's so cool. A very well thought-up storyline going on. I can't wait 'till Heero's a little better. ^_^ He's so stubborn. I wanna know what happens!! >< I can sympathize with the whole being an author thing tho, I really need to update my own stories... but i still wanna know what happens!! I really hope you can find the time to post another awesome chapter! *Puppy dog eyes* Please!
'Till the next chapter,
-Patricia
Anrui Shino
2004-07-06 . chapter 2
looking forward to it. i'll be waiting for the next update =)
Wing
2004-07-04 . chapter 2
Ooh...this sounds interesting...the only concern I have is that I'm getting confused with your pov. Sometimes you say "she" to refer to Relena...that being third person but sometimes the story is in Relena's point of view. But I do get the basic idea of your story and I'm interested in seeing where this goes. Civil war...hmm...just a woman and a man...all alone in the cabin in the woods. Hm...*winks* It's cool the different roles you put the characters in. Keep it up and please post soon! From the ever so *sweet* and *kawaii*~Wing
raigne
2004-07-04 . chapter 2
hey! so that landon guy is relena's fiancee? is she living alone on that cabin? good thing that landon guy didn't get her pregnant. i like this..please do continue. :D
CrimsonDragon010
2004-07-03 . chapter 2
great fic! i lvoe how its going so far, and i really can't wait for the next chapter. hee hee some healing time (^_~) Looking forward to some romance update son!
Saiya-jin Patricia
2004-07-03 . chapter 2
I can tell this is gonna be an awesome fic ^_^ I can see this whole situation getting very interesting. The plot sounds very interesting already and I know you'll get more reviews the more chapters you put up. Thanks for thanking me for reviewing. ^^ I hope you keep writing and I look foward to the next chapter.
-Patricia
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