Kasumi taught her the mallet trick?

i had a lot of fun reading ranma's part of the dialogues. really hilarious. nice on-shot!

lol it was funny till the end XD n the romantic part was awesome. (but i think shampoo must have given up sense she didnt take advantis of ranma while he was "druged")

anyway loved it 3

very nice

hahahaha i'm scared for ranma!

aiya! that was interesting. i shall continue.

Nice story though kinda long. I don't think Ranma would be able to talk or have that long speech. Still, the story is great!

aww very cute! I loved it! Congrats!

phoenixkagome

Well, that was certainly cute

Thanks for the fic. It was short and sweet, to the point, and fun...with decent grammar thrown in, as well. I think someone I remember reading something similar quite a while back, but you did a great job with Ranma's rambling.

Thanks again for the fic.

ahahahhahahahha!

how funny! _

A few comments after reading just the first part. I LIKE the plot it has a great deal of potential. Unfortunately, you insisted on a blooming flashback. Even worse, you presented it as though you were writing code rather than prose. There are any number of ways to slip the reader into a flashback, usually requiring only a single sentence, so why use the off-putting and intrusive "Begin Flashback" and "End Flashback" tags? It is maddening.

Here is something else to bear in mind. You could have and should have started this story with Ranma's ingestion of the "truth drug" thereby avoiding any need for a flashback and thereby simplifying the story and your job of writing the yarn.

I'm off to a bit more reading of your story. I am wondering if Ranma will tell himself the truth while he is under the influence of this stuff. THAT would be truly hilarious.

Okay! Here's the long-awaited (well, maybe not) final review!

First, I thought this ended rather abruptly! Second, the romance and humour didn't really balance. I mean, it was mostly humor, and then suddenly, at the end...BAM! Romance. I won't deny that the story was entertaining, but it was most certainly so. But I just think that you could have done a better job of balancing those two genres. :)

The ending was cute, and Charlotte? Hah! Now that was perfect. Poor Pierre. :(

Nice job, keep it up! Practice makes perfect!

Ranma's proposal speech was soo long and rambling. Hah!

...Poor Ranma. How could he tell Akane what he thought she might be able to tolerate? Haha!

LMAO. The book...hilarious.

Poor Charlotte. :D