i just wanted to point out that in the team at the bottom you forgot to put in the dratini that mark recently caught

Wow. Charmander's old trainer makes damien (Ash's charizard's old trainer) seem sensitive.


I really love the idea of the Agreement.


Will that little Eevea be okay

He wants to go home? Wow, plot twist much?

~General Everin Stormclaw of the Many Titles, High Priest of the Crazy Hand, Master of the Emerald Stars and Acolyte of the New Chu Order, Dragon Prince and the Sixth Sutakage, Bearer of the Prophecy and the Moonrider, Commander of the Blood Talons and the Last Hairlander, S/He Who Knows and Servant To That Which Waits, out.

Huh, pretty good reading so far. You're actually quite talented at group battles, of which they are quite a few enjoyable ones in this fic. Eh, my advise to you would be to avoid the cliche of one on one face-offs in pokemon group battles and focus more on tactics, such as simultaneous attacks, flanking, covering and such.

Chaletwo and May are actually quite good reading material, even though they're morally reprehensible in so many humorous ways. Coincidentally, was the reason why the blastoise in this chapter so fast because of rain dance?

Anyway, good job and keep it up.

Um... Why did Marc say he didn't have a trainer ID? What happened to his pokedex? Isn't the ID in it that he used to get a room in a hotel considered a trainer ID?

Wait, the police can't just hand Charmeleon back over to Taylor can they? Plus didn't Charmeleon say that May had already gone and registered him as HERS before she discovered he was only a level 5 pokemon instead of level 15? So how can he still be registered as Taylors even if the trade hadn't been legal?

Plus while Jenny was talking about doing illegal trades without the pokemon consent, why didn't she open the balls and actually ASK the pokemon if they wanted to go back to their original owners, since she seemed to be doing exactly what the kids had done with the trading.

Plus I say Charmeleon is legally Marc's now, since the ball Charmeleon is in belongs to niether May OR Taylor. He 'caught' Charmeleon in it after rescuing him from the rain as Charmander, so that should negate any former claims the other two had on Charmeleon. He should have demanded that they call his parents to get them to confirm just where and how he got Charmeleon. Even if it got May in trouble, leaving a fire type pokemon like Charmander half dead in a rainstorm should have gotten the other two in trouble BIG time. *lol*

Very good story, and a very tactful chapter. I noticed how you "neglected" to mention the name of Ash's wife. Smart move. It would be a shame for such a good fanfiction to lose readers over a stupid shipping war.

Right, I'll keep reading the rest now.

Woah, that's pretty funny if you think about it. (Shifts eyes*) I'm being stalked by a giant bug with scythes for arms!!* Heh, poor Michael. Aw well, good battle and good descriptions. It also looks like Mark is working on his confidence and, in the next chapter perhas? strategy. :)

...awesome.

~General Everin Stormclaw of the Many Titles, High Priest of the Crazy Hand, Master of the Emerald Stars and Acolyte of the New Chu Order, Dragon Prince and the Sixth Sutakage, Bearer of the Prophecy and the Moonrider, Commander of the Blood Talons and the Last Hairlander, S/He Who Knows and Servant To That Which Waits, out.

I'm not sure if it's a good thing that she evolved. For battling, yes, but I imagine it's going to cause even more trouble for Mark than he realizes. She'll probably want to leave him to go back to her pride or whatever and kill her father now. That would suck if she left. I like her, despite her being a complete asshat half the time and emo the other half (though with her evolution, she'll prolly stop being emo). D: I think it was the revenge-plot revolving around her that I liked so much. Either way, it would kind'a suck if she left. :< And poor Dragonite, his first real fight as a Dragonite, against an already-weakened opponent, and all he got to do was weaken for the next fighter to finish off. /comfort

Why do you always release a chapter of both of these 'fics at the same time? I'm not complaining, it's nice getting to sit down and read a new chapter of both in one sitting, it just seems strange to work simultaneously on two different stories, lol.

I like the description of Mark's hometown and school as well as his classes! If i were a trainer, i would avoid North-West Ouen completely if it were-not for the pokemonolgy class! That seems like such an awesome, awesome class


I sure hope that mark is able to save the life of that charmander!

This new chapter was great. Just great. You managed to keep me reading for half an hour whitout me noticing that I had been reading that long. Your story just keeps on getting better. The evolution of Letal was something that I expected, but it wasn't less fantastic to actually read it. You did an amazing job in this chapter, and I wish you good luck with your next one.

Yay for Letal! ...er, Letaligon! You would bring pokerus into this. ^_^ First time I've ever seen it added it into a story, so I think yer the first. I'm curious to see how that may play out for future chapters. I know it was used so Letal could fight, but knowing you, something else is coming, so be sure to update as quickly as possible to please my oh so horrible curious nature! -_- Good luck with the rest!

finally u update. at least the good thing for letal it evolve as well winning mark the match in the league.

YAY FOR LETALIGON!
How do you pronounce that?

~Stormy

hey have u watched the 10th movie of pokemon, it pretty awesome.