too many comments after the story. still the story is well written

You wrote:

"Dumbledore and McGonagall were leading Mr and Mrs Granger away (don't ask how they got in the school…I don't know but their not magic)"

PLEASE - DON'T EDITORIALIZE. None of us need it and it's really a very, very lame thing to be doing. If you've GOT to comment, do it at the end. We don't need to see it within the context of the story.


The_scribbler

I makes no sense that Lily would leave anything for Hermione.

I don't like Tonks being older either.

:-(

I'm wondering what was in the trunk to make Harry get so mad?

Harry cutting himself seems OOC. If he wanted to punish him self, he'd do it by blowing up in anger at his friends to drive them away.

I'm intrigued by the intermittant possession plotline

I'm on chapter 3 now. I sought out your fic because I wanted to read a Harry/Hermione fic that was uncontaminated by those awful two books. I really peeves me that after she got rich, JKR was less careful about her writing! I could better understand her cranking out crap to make money when she was poor.
Hermione/Ron is the worse cannon 'ship ever. Hermione and Luna are the only cannon characters that seem suitable for Harry. But I think the REAL match for Hermione should be someone she met after Hogwarts, like an Unspeakable or an M-theory Phyisicist.

your past present future should read

preteritus tendo posterus

Hello Hello Hello! Long time no review! So i was going through my profile and i saw this story and i had just watched the new half blood prince teaser and i decided im going to read this story again and i've gotten two chapter 21 and it's still as good as ever, better with every time i read it, and iw as going to wait to review until i got the end of the story but i came across this:

You see,” he said quietly. “Our deepest desires can be one of our deepest weaknesses. Sometimes they’re not though, do not that anyone make you think that. Our desires can keep us alive. They can drive us insane yet they can keep us san. They can be the cause of our downfall or our up rise...” his deep voice cracked slightly and he felt his own eyes water up slightly. “They can be the reason we die, or the reason we live...'

and this is my favorite quote like ever and i had forgotten which fanfiction i had gotten it from i just remembered it was from one that was Harry Potter and its on my wall of inspirational quotes lol! Now how is that for a long review! Anyway Tata's

N>K

This story is really good, but you need a beta who can read and understands the english language. There are about twenty or more errors on each chapter, I understand that typos happen but!

“WOW! THAT WAS A NICE HIT FROM BEATER LEVISON! FRED, GEORGE, I THINK YOU TWO HAVE GOTTEN PERFECT PREDECESSORS!”? try SUCCESSORS.

Like I said, Great plot, sad beta-ing.

Jeff

I like it. You have talent. Though I agree your other stories could use some work. PERSERVIER!

This story was really good! I'm deffinitly reading the sequal.

I loved this story! I give it 5 STARS.

ok i know you've finished this story and im goin to finish it
but this chapter made me cry! and to remind you its the chapter when the wills get read out. when harry saw lilly and james god i was in tears. you a great author but now im goin to finish the story =]

this isn't a flame, but i must say, the quality wasn't that great in this chapter. harry is such a surface character in this. all he is is anger, and i guess cursing all of a sudden. you just, to me at least, didn't depict harry in a way that seems very plausible. maybe if u went more into harry's thoughts, instead of him just having his first sentence in this story with the f-bomb...basically, just not very in character. even if u were going for a different character altogether, it was still pretty weird...i'll let u know i only read like the first half of this chapter though, so maybe it gets better at the end; however, i'd change the characterization. it's exactly how a person acts...

oh i cant believe i finally found this books again, this was the book i first read on fanfiction back then i didnt have a account now that i do ill be savin this on my thing ^_^