Paine...

Wow...Auron's little girl. Can't say I haven't thought of it like that, but that doesn't mean I don't like your story.

Honestly, I love it. I know, I shouldn't get my hopes up for a fast update, but I would just love to see what happens to Auron and Paine and if you'll still be able to keep within the game storyline.

Not that I'm saying you can't, but a lot of people here muck up the whole game when they write their story, and somehow end up making an Alternate Universe when all they did was change a person's dressphere...
I swear, it's the truth.

She's so kawaii when she was child, Layla's sounds so pretty, wow, Auron sure has changed a lot...

HEY! If she wasn't a warrior when she was a recorder for the Crimson Squad, then how did she kill that Gemini in the Crimson Sphere? Rather confused, here?

I'm sorry, I just had to point that out.

Loving your story, and will patiently hope and wait for the next chapter. Till then, miokuri!

It breaks my heart that people tried to kill Paine. She's one serious badass in the FF series, and I get upset at the thought of her being hurt, even emotionally. Keep up the great work. This is one of the absolute greatest fics out there. Hope to see more soon. Cheers.

Ohh! GOOD! MORE! More! More! PLZ! *shakes computer* PLZ! MORE! MORE MORE MORE!! *Rikku restrains me from attacking computer* NO! LEMME GO! *Rikku whispers something to Paine* O_O *Paine knocks me out*

Oh, so long we have had to wait for this brilliant chapter and again another lengthy wait for the next one! Damn you! hehe
Ok, maybe not the NEAR future but how about the close future?! lol
Please write soon, i love this story!

Yes, by all means, please finish this story, as you state in your bio. I recall reviewing before, but my shoddy memory prevents me from recalling exactly when. Regardless, one of my favorite stories simply must conclude properly. Take your time if necessary, but not forever. Keep up the excellent work. Cheers.

It is interesting to see this period of time covered from the persective of another writer. You have done it well. However, the story telling would be improved if you could find some other phrasing for many of the cliches which blemish this chapter.

"like moisture returning to a parched land"
"like a drowning man struggling towards the surface."
"like a bloodstain on a cold blade"
"Crusaders armed to the teeth."

There are others. Can you find fresher ways to say these things?

I am also a little confused by the geography. Did they flee from the Den of Woe to Djose only to decide to retrace their steps past the Mushroom Rock locale in order to reach the Highroad and the path to the Travel Agancy? Why do this?

I hope this does not seem mere nit-picking to you. It is that I have seen you avoid this sort of pitfall in the past.

This is a good chapter! It's interesting to see someone's take on what happened inside the Den of Woe ... and you make it so, I don't know, real and believable I guess is what I'm trying to say. I can actually envision what you were trying to say. If that makes any sense. lol

Anyway, this is super, and look, I reviewed the right chapter this time! XD

Oh, this is getting good! I really really like the way you described things in this chapter, especially Auron's reaction to seeing Paine. That was really nicely done. And your descriptions of colors are really nice too ... her eyes are the color of blood, I like that.

Keep up the good work, hopefully you'll be able to get more written soon!

An interesting idea, and a good story too. I can't wait for the next chapter. I'll keep an eye out.

Poor, poor Auron. Now I know why he was so eager to be Sent.

Wonderful! Almost brought me to tears just as so many other of the chapters in this incredible story! Please tell me that this is not the end! PLEASE!

OK, i'm aware i'm a year late on reviewing this, but WOAH! That was god!
I don't know where to begin! It was A.M.A.Z.I.N.G! That is such a sad story line! But so good! I'm always going to think of that as another part to the ffx/x-2 series now! I don't know what to say apart from i couldn't find any meaningful faults! It was great! How did you come up with something so brilliant, i wish i had your writing talent! Every character was really well done and the way you wrote it made it possible to feel what all the characters were feeling! I have to say, this is one of my favourite, favourite stories.
It's so good, words don''t do it justice and i'm not just saying this or just trying to suck up or whatever, i truely loved this story! I'm going to recomend it to all my friends!
Now, i'll be off to read more of your amazing stories! :D
You rock!

I hope this story isnt finished. How far is it going to go?

hey! sorry i haven't reviewed for such a long time. I thought you'd given up, but no! here you are!
nah,i have quit writing my FFX story, although this summer holiday, once i leave school forever, i shall begin to continue my story so look forward to it!

now onto about your story.

The last two chapters were as of normal high content and structure (I sound like my teacher!) Yeah, so it ties in with both FFX and FFX-2 perfectly, and its totally believable! you should become a proffesional!

please continue!

Xmaster

o *shivers* that was a good one.

the last chapter was aptly titled, as the tears were mine. keep writing.