Wow, I readed the entire story and I tell you that I love it!

I'll waiting anxious for the next update.

Keep going and good job!

(Sorry for my english, i'm not well at it)

Aw, a year or two pass and you haven't update this. I hope you will someday because this is really awesome! And for some reason the way you have Piccolo's character...it's almost like he really exists. It's the excatly way I see him as and it's great! You do a good job in getting him in character completely but also show sides of him without taking anything from his character.

Khri is even awesome and it's wonderful how she has flaw that make her relatable but also a fighter/hero on her own. I admire that. Haha I'm going to check out the illustrations then since this story really has me hook to it.

hi! i just finished the 26th chapter and i just wanted to know if you'd update. it's an amazingly well written story please keep up the good work and update. :D

hi! i love chapter 19! it was so sad! well written but so freaking sad!! my heart was just torn apart about khri losing everything! i cried... it was just that sad! you're one of my favorite writers! please continue to update and let me know okay?

I think this has got to be among one of the best Piccolo fic I've read in a very long time. Maybe ever. You do a wonderfull job of keeping everyone in char while still bringing your own people and races into the picture. Bravo. Since its been a few years since this was udated I sorry to see you didn't get a chance to finish the sory. Yet I totally understand how those things go. Anyway great story with wonderful writing. Wishing you all the best for your future. ^_^*

Ah, pity. You haven't updated in quite some time. I hope to see an update at some point. Good writing, it took me nearly a full day to reach the end, and I loved every minute of it.

Bravo!

I love your artwork of Khri. Sai looks awsome too but he can't hold a candle to Piccolo. Still, its fun that you threw a rival into the mix to make Piccolo jealous.

a very good fic so far

Love it! So plese never take it down and please add more!

I really love the story so far, and there are only minor flaws in a few sentences that are confusing. There are a few words that seem to have switched places, which only takes a few seconds for the reader to correct. However, when I try to go to chapter 19, I get a One Piece fanfic, and when I try to go to chapter 20, I get the search page. I know this probably isn't your fault, but I don't know how to report it. Please try to fix it! I really want to know what happens! If it's to much trouble, you could e-mail me instructions on how to fix the problem, and I would try my best to remedy it. Or, if you would be so kind, you could e-mail me a copy of the two chapters? Wishing you the best of luck on continuing and future stories, vegetassj4jj.

Female weapons huh? Trust Vegeta to use war allegory to describe a relationship!

I must say this chapter's a lot more, um, vivid than the other ones although tastefuly so. I really love how you have Piccolo and Khri gradually but surely "come together" so to speak. (rubs hands gleefully) I know Part 2's going to be good!

*giggles* Female weapons... *giggles again* He's in for a treat! XD

AWESOME STORY

E! *dances in a circle like a spaz* This was great! I knew waiting would pay off!

That tracker thingy is werid...Where did you get the idea for it? It would be damn useful...not that I would use it, of course.

~the ness-ness~

Very interesting chapter! Vegeta's warning was pretty hilarious. Poor Piccolo...haha, I can't wait to see where you're going with this! Very glad that you were able to update, I've missed this story.