"We both understand there are more people in bed than ourselves."

Love that line best. I'm too much of a SeiSub to appreciate SubaruKamui properly. I believe Kamui has some feelings for Subaru but the latter doesn't return it the same way...They could pretend but they were aware that they were lying to themselves.

Short and neat. Could be extended more, use other people's perspectives...(Why am I thinking of Sorata??)

It's so painful to see them pretend to be "normal", especially because of the setting and *knowing* what's going to happen.

But I do love how "normal" their conversation sounds, even though we know better.

And that last line = LOVE. Great job.

I like it, and that's a rare thing when it comes to Subaru and Kamui.
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I'm too much of a FxK and SxS shipper at heart, but I do so love these little drabbles that understand their issues. Because they've both got major issues that wouldn't be solved in a relationship together. And too few SxK stories acnowledge that they're there.
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And I know I spelt that wrong. =\

Very, very beautiful, and very sad. Quite an accurate description of a "love" affair they might have had at that time - the one thing optimistic about this story, the thought that they had. I, too, liked the line about there being more in their bed best. It's what, especially at that time, both drives them together and keeps them apart.
I'd love to see another part set at a later point in the story - around volume 17, 18. Things have changed by then, haven't they?

Oh, and I'm adding this story to my favourites list. Just thought I'd let you know. :)

Thanks a lot for the dedication :D

This was enjoyable to read - the portrayal of their relationship is honest and realistic, and yet still touching. The premise is good and the inbetween paragraphs very engaging, though I found the dialogue a little too stilted (mostly the repetition of names) even for such a stark fic.

"We both understand there are more people in bed than ourselves."

I loved that line. Captures everything wrong and right about their relationship all at once.

That was awesome - just perfect! I mean, the way you portrayed Subaru and Kamui's relationship ... it's exactly how I see it, and there just aren't enough fics out there that bring it out into the open. It's so bittersweet, and you want them to be happy ... but you know that it's not with each other that they can find true happiness. And you brought that out just perfectly! Yay!

Eerie. And I'm not talking about the topic itself, because you know, we haven't had our argument yet. ^.^ You know I haven't read the manga, but I know enough of the basics that I can follow. Plus you were wise enough to embellish your setting line, which goes beyond numbers to summarize the most important aspect of mood of those volumes, the aspect from which you drew. Very good move.
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No, really...it's eerie. And its quiet acceptance of its own situation and the inability of the two to influence the world which watches them, or chase the shadows from thier bed, is what makes it so abnormal. Which of course is the irony you were intending by the title.
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I'd write more but I'm tired and my grammar is suffering (looks at last paragraph/runon sentence, cringes). So I think I'll add this to our list of things to talk about, and leave you a good goodnight--unlike the tragic boys, *we* say "sweet dreams." ^.^
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Thanks for the bedtime story, Sorcha--it fit my mood just perfectly.
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~Thirteenth Nightengale