|Reviews for On the Run|
| Robot.In.Disguise 8/21/04 . chapter 7
HA! I didn't see it coming at all when the cop said "And none of you, I know, want to miss the rodeo."
One thing I noticed in the phone conversation.. when Dal was talking to Soda, Soda says that Pony woke up that morning. When he talks to Steve, Steve says Pony hasn't woken up yet.
Oops or Steve just didn't know?
| MissLKid 8/18/04 . chapter 7
well you see, my sister... really annoys me. sharing a room with her and all doesnt make getting along iwth her easy.. and she copies me too much! so i dont really like pickin things out for her... a rodeo, huh? this should be interesting.
| crimson cutie 8/17/04 . chapter 7
Thanks for repsonding to my review. To be honest part of the reason I didn't review before is I like the anonmous nature of the internet and leaving a review is exposing part of myself. (heh maybe I have more in common with Dallas than I thought seeing as how I have a shell too.) But like I said I've really been enjoying your story and felt I owed you a good review.
I found it interesting that you thinck part of the reason Dally built up such a hard shell is because underneath he is so sensitive. I never really thought about him that way but we don't know what he was like as a little boy on the streets of New York. It makes sense as Johny brought out his sensitive side. He really did care about Johnny to the point where he felt he couldn't live without Johnny.
Hey I was right about who the hoods were. The confrontation was interesting. I wonder if Dally was embarrassed to be siding with a soc. It certainly didn't impress Nathan. He could exactly tell them that he was hiding out in front of Jason.
I don't think it was all that surprising that Jason guessed Dally was a hood-he certainly didn't try to cover up the attitude. Of course Dally might not have realized how much he's revealed about himself through his actions and words. Likewise I think that Lisa and Brain have guessed that he's a hood.
So I was right to that he would call the gang to check on Pony. I loved Two-Bit's words so typical of him. Darry's right no car stealing, the last thing he needs is more trouble with the law. Maybe one of the gang will come pick him up in a few weeks. I'm a little surprised he gave in so easliy with Darry. You couldn't tell the old Dallas Winston what to do (unless you're Johnny). You let Jason make him buy the dog but he has to keep up the facade and get back his, I mean Two-Bit's switch. But than again Darry had good advice and you can't punch a guy over the phone. So Dallas is going to keep out of trouble? Somehow I doubt that.
I guess what you mean by real life intervening again is school's starting. Well I look forward to reading the next chapter whenever you get a chance to write it.
| Oblivious Misconception 8/17/04 . chapter 7
Wow! I can’t believe I ever skipped over this story. I mean, I usually can’t get into stories that involve more than 1 or 2 original characters, but the family you have created is incredible. The explicit detail and characterization that you have included perfectly accentuates each chapter, creating such interesting subplots throughout. You have made sure that Dallas continues to stay in character, which is very hard to do considering the situation and his emotional state following Johnny’s death. The different interactions between Dally and the members of Matthews family are very well-written. I like the relationships you have developed among Dally and the siblings, particularly Jason. Jason seems to be really looking out for Dally despite knowing some pretty bad things about him. I also have to mention that I absolutely loved how it was Darry’s number that Dally gave to Brian. That was classic and added a beautiful touch to that particular chapter. I really look forward to seeing what you have planned for this story. Keep up the excellent work. Please update soon!
| Tensleep 8/17/04 . chapter 7
Wow! I loved it. The confrontation was perfect then Dallas discriptions of what a hood was was perfect. I really think this was great. The phone call was a nice touch and using Two-bit's name! I was wondering when you were going to put that in. Well I would love to go on and on, but apparently I have chores. I love going away and getting put to work. I can't wait for the next chapter! You really write very well.
See ya in the funny papers! Tens
| steves-girl 8/17/04 . chapter 7
hey great chappie, adn of corse it was worth the wait, and i don't mind if the up-dates take longer, sides i'm havein troble getting on teh computer my self.
| CiCi 8/17/04 . chapter 7
Sorry about not reviewing the last chapter. My computer is breaking down and I havent been on it in a few weeks. But I just want to say that this was a great chapter! ttyl! Luvs and Hugs CiCi
| bitterspirit 8/17/04 . chapter 7
This story continues to be amazing! I've been reading it from the beginning but I've never really found the time to review it until now. Sorry. :(
I've read a lot of stories about Dallas, but yours is the only one that has kept the closest to his character. I want to congratulate you for that, because Dallas is really difficult to write. I like that he's slowly becomming softer. Like how he stood up for Jason.
Like other reviewers have said, I think Carly has a crush on Dally. I can't wait to see how she reacts when he gives her the present. :D
I also like your style of writing. It's to the point, yet you add the important details. I hate it when some authors go on and on about, for example, exactly how the pattern on couch was. I like how you put detail but you don't make a paragraphe on it.
All in all, I think this story is definitely in my top 3 favorite stories in all of . I completely understand that you have a life of your own, so I won't pressure you to post the next chapter soon, but please don't make us wait too long! This is a great story. I've added you to my Favorite Authors, Favorite Stories, and my Author Alert list!
Whoa. This is one hell of a long review. I guess I'll shut up now. Lol. Anyways, keep up the good work!
| Phlossy 8/16/04 . chapter 7
*peels off back of bumper stickers and put it on her 1966 Triumph 20* Now that's a nice lookin' car, eh? Anyway, I liked this chapter. I was so hoping it would be Tim though... Ah, well. It wasn't half bad, either. I liked it alot... It seems like Dallas' defenses are slowly starting to crumble. Like a cookie. Lol. Anyway, I think that this is one of the better Dally stories because of it. I mean, some stories, he brakes down in the first paragraph of the first chapter, others it takes 20 some chapters, adn that's just frustrating. I think I spelled that wrong. Anyway, I like this, because it's happening slowley, but not... molasses slow. I think I spelled that wrong too. *sighs* Anyway, Have a cookie for another AWSOME vhapter to the great legacy of Dallyliciousness! Lol.
| Beth 8/15/04 . chapter 7
Hey! I was so excited to read this! I know that I've been saying that for practically all of my reviews, but I liked this chapter.
I enjoyed Cliff Anderson! I think it was a good move to create a new character and stay away from cliche. Good job, I liked him.
I thought it was so funny how Dally was explaining loyalty to Jason.. I can picture Dally in the book saying the exact same thing! Great way to stay in character.
The phone call was great; I had this on-going mental picture of the gang at the Curtis' all shoving each other to get to the phone. I might have missed this, but what day was it? Wouldn't Darry, Soda and Steve be at work? Who knows, I'm not even sure what today's date is!
I'm sorry for such a short review, my computer has been going haywire lately, and I want to finish this up before it breaks down again. Keep writing, I'm looking forward to another update soon!
A Faithful Reviewer,
| Jessie13 8/15/04 . chapter 7
That was a great chapter. I'm glad I finally got to find out who the gang was that Dal ran into and it was funny when he gave the cop Two-Bit's name. Update soon. It seems that this story gets better with every chapter.
| AchillesMonkey 8/15/04 . chapter 7
What tone? *innocent smile* UPDATE SOON!
| crimson cutie 8/12/04 . chapter 6
I've been reading your story ever since you first posted it and I figured I owed you a review. I've really been enjoying your story and was waiting for you to come back so you could update again.
You've made Dallas much softer than he was in the book but I think it does capture how he would be so messed up emotionally after all that happened. Dally blaming himself for Johnny's death makes sense.
In particular I've enjoyed the scene where Brain blackmails Dally into giving him his dad's number but we find out he gave him the Curtis' instead. It's a goodthing Darry answered the phone because Two-bit probably wouldn't have figured it out and knowing Pony he would blurted out something stupid before it hit him. Not sure if Soda would have figured it out. I wonder if Brain will every find out he didn't really call Dally's parents, although the gang is more like family than his dad.
I also liked the part where Jason caught Dally tring to kill himself and when Dally hears the story on the radio. Seems to me like Jason might start to connect the dots that the Johnny kid the guy on radio is talking about could be the same Johnny Dally had nightmares about. He never heard Dally's phony story about having a fight with his dad and from Dally's suicide atempt he knows that what happened to Dally is worse than some fight over school. If he heard Dally yelling about Ponyboy in his sleep than he would know for sure that Dally knew the kids on the raido, after all there are probably lots of Johnny's in Tulsa but only one Ponyboy.
Good chapter even if it was rushed. I think Lisa has learned not give Dallas jobs that have a lot of customer interaction. I wonder if Dally will have to keep checking the papers to find out if Pony's okay or if he will get the courage to call Darry and ask. I guess it depends on how worried he is. Little nitpick: Ponyboy didn't strike me as the type that's never sick.
Hmm cliffhanger ending. I'm surprised the hoods thought Dally was a soc. Even if he was dressed in Jason's clothes, (which I asume is what he's been wearing since his own clothes probably got torn up and bloodied in the rumble)he still has the greaser hair(minus the grease) and his hard eyes. I guess they didn't get a good look at him at first. So they regicnized him. I don't think it's any of the gang: what would they be doing in McAlester? plus the recignition would have occur as soon as the hoods first approached. I think it's just some hoods that know him from arond just because he has such a big reputation. But than as one reviewer suggested it could be Tim Shapard and some of his gang. That would lead to an interesting scene. I guess I'll just have to wait and see.
| Grease Girl 8/12/04 . chapter 6
Please Update ASAP! I wanna know who the guy that reconized Dallas is.
| nighttime writer 8/11/04 . chapter 1
yeah just coming back to add you to my author alert list