You have Laz & Lor down to a T. Love the way they communicate. If I remember correctly, Dora has a much more childlike personality. I think it was in "Time Enough For Love", Lazarus mentioned deliberately keeping her that way. (It could have been "The Number of The Beast", one of the two. I hope you continue this one or, do another one.

Good beginning! You really caught Heinlein's style. Please go on? An adventure with Hilda in it has got to be tremendous.

Aw... Lovely. Any ideas with Mamma Maureen bouncing about in your head?

Boy, even VALIS is funnier than this shit. Heinlein should have know when to quit. And the worst, there is a legion of ee-diots who feel 'inspired' by the crap he wrote...the End of Days is close...

Love that they need Dora thotell them what their babies are called!

LOL! i loved thew cat who walks through walls...hell i loved all 4 of the books. update soon i cant wait to see where this is going.

I wonder why you stopped writing this?
It is clear you had bigger plans for this fic. That's why you poured so much effort into it. Which, as it happens, is also the reason it is so enjoyable to read.
I hope you find new inspiration soon.

Well done! Bravo! Keep writing. I laughed my head off at "...that was Heinlein." I think he would've, too. But check your spelling in the third sentence.

a good star, please keep going

Fairly well done -- the characters match the Canonical characters in personality, although Dora canonically was more outspoken. Not the world's best job of conveying needed background information unobtrusively -- but given the scenario, any effort to do so is going to be a Beast (not sure which number ;^)).

I'd love to see this continued. But watch out for stobor!