I came across this story while searching through the not very populous archive of Storm/Wolverine fics in search of something worth reading. Something that wouldn't make me cringe with the poor representations of the characters' personalities and the often painful amount of grammatical and syntactical errors.
However this one was the exact opposite of those. It was excellent.

I have only encountered one other story in the entire X-Men Movie fandom that was expressed and organized in such a beautiful way.

So as to ensure that you will appreciate this review as the well rounded critique it is intended to be, I would like you to know that I am not merely flattering you or your story. I am writing these comments to point out the things you've done right in this fic as you asked us readers to do in your profile page.

The thing that struck me as this fics strongest point, is how well the emotions of the characters are conveyed with your words. The words seem to perfectly describe the way each person is feeling in light of Jean's recent death. I agree that the situation could have been better portrayed in the movie and you've done a beautiful job of it. Which leads me to praise the virtually perfect consistency between each charater's personality and the way their emotions have been depicted.

No one is out of charater.
The moment of shared grief and support between Scott and Logan in chapter two was especially well written.

I'm sorry for you loss. I believe it has contributed to how real the feelings of the characters, because of Jean's death, were written.

You said in your profile that you hope to soon become skillfull enough to write original fiction. In my opinion you are well on your way.

I really enjoyed this fic and I hope you find a chance to update again soon.

Karai

Shocked might be too strong a word, but I'm so glad you're updating again! This scene with Logan and Scott was something I've always wanted to see, and the description of the tree was a nice touch. Well done. Now I'm going to go dig up the update for Rememory. I've got a lot to catch up on.

Nice. I always love Scott/Logan friendship moments, when well written. They have a great Odd Couple dynamic. This was an incredible scene -- very vivid. You surprised me -- I expected you to concentrate on Ororo for this next chapter, or maybe for the rest of the story.

Hey! What a great little chappie! (or, OK, not so little) I wasn’t really expecting it to be that good because there’ve been so many X2 codas done by authors, and most are mediocre offerings at best. But you have a talent for expressing emotions in writing, and your characterization is spot-on. It’s a very affecting story, but I notice your little “in medias res” bit was posted 2 & a half yrs ago… ever gonna finish? I’d really love to see what else you had in mind for this storyline. It was excellent. Ororo’s stream of consciousness was my fav part.

At risk of sounding corny or false, it was very moving. If this was a painting, the colours would be blue, slate, and grey. Very affective.

very nice fic!! sad but nice. you write really nice and i hope that you update this fic soon! :)

Your writing is so captivating! If I didn't have you in my favorite author's list already I'd be putting you in it now.

All I have to say is wow... well maybe i could say i bit more. it was awesome. just completly awesome (i read it over 10 times now) i cant even pick a favorite part out of all that... whoa... awesome job!

Damn. Wow. That's all I can really say when I read your stories. I mean, your style leaves me completely speechless. I feel like anything I say will never be worthy or truly express how beautiful I think this story has started. This made my head spin, seriously, and I reveled in every moment of it. I can't wait to read more.

Woah. Your style is extraordinary - so lyrical, so beautiful, it's like reading poetry in prose. I wish I had the courage to write as you do. It's tremendous. I'm going to look for more of your stories...

A great beginning, punctuated all the more by the fact that it begins with an end. You never cease to amaze me with your lyrical handling of words. That is something I feel is almost a trademark. Your elegant and fluent descriptions of things that seem unimportant in everyday life and yet hold a beauty of their own. The whole scene with Rogue staring out of the window was intensely beautiful. You have a great grip on flow of consciousness, but you take it to another level, entwining thoughts with displaced action. With Nature. Like listening to the flow of classical music and being swept along with an imagined landscape. To me anyhow, who can't describe these things very well. ;)

And the loss, oh the loss. You depict grief well. Grief and consternation and, moreover, silence, but I've said that before, I think. How different people deal differently with their loss, how grief isn't just the kind of grief you see on TV or the movies. I can sympathise with Ororo, being the one holds things together, because she is the one that automatically holds *herself* together. Anger is a horrible thing to hold bottled up inside oneself, all the more so when you lose someone you love. Ro has never been my favourite X-Man, but you've actually opened up a side of her that I can empathise with fully.

Eagerly awaiting more.

You have very lush descriptions and a certain care in regards to characterization that I enjoyed. I'm also in the process of writing my own version of X3 (it won't be posted until I get about 10 chapters written so that updates appear fairly regular) so I'm enthralled with the completely different direction that you're taking.

The only bit of criticism that I have for you is this: watch your tense. This piece is primarily in past tense and every so often you flip to present.
"Rogue decided she likes Arial while twirling a lock of her hair nonchalantly." I chose this sentence as an example because not only do you flip tense, but you do inside a single sentence where as the other ones are at least present/past for an entire sentence.

But I'm very interested in what you do with Ororo, since being a comic book reader as well, I felt the movie royally gipped her. I can't wait.

beautiful

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