Oh. My. God.

EPIC WIN! Please please please PLEASE write more for this!

w.t.f. this made no sense whatsoever! You almost crossed the line of putting too many discriptives with too many adjectives, when you do that-a reader gets BORED. To say it .sucks. there you go. No explanations, no plotline, and if that was a cliffhanger ending-it was horrible. This story made me want to kill myself.

AHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.

"It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents — except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets (for it is in London that our scene lies), rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness."

I love your referance. Bill Nye kicks butt.

O.o yay! Time for celebration folks! My science class would love to hear this joyous news! I want to send roses to the person who killed him...what? I'm serious xD

What a random and abrupt ending. XD But there's just something about it. XDD

omg! hahahahahahahahahaahhaa!

-hsmtroyella

LOL HOW ROTE THIS

why isn't bill dead yet? it's been WAY more than 7 days!

Dear Author,

"It was in pretty bad condition, the window shutters falling off, the doors creaking, the floor rotting away and an infestation of rats." Please use parallel sructure here! It would sound much better if you were to change it to something like, "It was in pretty bad condition; the window shutters were falling off, the doors were creaky, the floors were rotting away, and there was a rat infestation." The last part sounds better in active voice because it now directly relates to the subject of that particular predicate, which is "rat".

You have a misspelled word: "marsh mellows." This refers to a wet swamp land that is not very active. I believe you were thinking of the tasty treat "marshmallows".

Thank you for the paragraph breaks when using dialogue (the last fic I read did not have any...it made me sad). You made me happy.

Sincerely,

Maude, the Grammar Nazi

ROTFLOL! I guess Bill watched the video!

o_O;

What the freakin he-?

No offence to you, but that was dumb.

If you made it longer and continued it, then it would have been better.

Boy, you got a lot of flames for this story but I don't see how it hurt them to read it. It's not horrible, just short. I don't regret reading it. Keep working on your writing in the future. Or perhaps you already have...well, chao anyway!

That was great... very short and sweet and funny. I totally kek'd. Keep it up! A

Forget what dancerboy8 said This was one of the funniest fanfics I have ever read.