Nice...Thought,pikachu will probably never evolve...Sh-..I mean..it doesn't want to!

yeah! Pikachu is now raichu!

I live...! Anyway, this story made me cry. I really like, however, how Pikachu was torturing himself/herself/itself with deciding whether to evolve or not. But Pikachu still evolved! T.T I have nothing against Raichu, mind, but it's still an earthshattering idea (for me, anyway...)

Some improvements you could make are the obvious grammar and spelling tweaks, making the document easier to read, and making Ash's reaction a little more believable. (Pikachu's been his friend for how long, five years, give or take? How would you feel if your best friend for that long suddenly changed shape overnight?)

Other than that, awesome! Keep up the good work!

Aw how sweet please continue this somehow because I like the concept Pikachu finally evolved well anyway PLEASE WRITE AGAIN SOON! ;)

Very nice and well thought out. A little clumsily written in some spots, but not so terrible as to ruin the story. Good job!

Awe, that was so sweet! ^.^ I do agree with the last reviewer though, it was a bit difficult to read. But it was really cute, I enjoyed it a lot. You explained Pikachu's feelings about the Thunder Stone perfectly. Make more of these. Ja ne!

-JG

Nicely done... Could use a few more paragraph spaces, though. It's kinda hard to read.

That was so sweet! Good job!