heya, this is really good so far. it's kinda interesting to see another side to Rory, be it through fan fiction, but it's a good interesting.
keep writing!


"Fan Fiction is a really great distraction from the sometimes harshness of reality." -destiny062

I hope you continue although it seems that you aren't gonna since it has been 2 years! please think about

Love it, love it, love it. You so need to finish! Even if it's just one more little add on conclusion. . . it's catharsis! Please?

This chap was great. I could tell that the people at the pizza parlor were going to have Gilmore-quirks of their own. . . and I loved that Rory didn't get a cliché fan fiction, like working at a bookstore or something.

Also, Luke had the best line I've ever read in fandom: "'I mean, I made him promise to keep me up to speed about where he was. You know, in case I needed a kidney or something...'" -Love!

Fabulous. I'm still not so keen on the not-Rory-and-Jess parts, but you did the Lorelai telling the Gilmore nicely. I like the Literati better, though.

"Ironic how now that he actually had someone to ** to, the urge suddenly lost its immediacy." -Best line ever!

I love it. Jess and Rory catching up, bonding, reconnecting - it's very well done. I love description, too, which you handle quite as well as your dialog.

"Jess' tales were fewer and he told them with indifference, a sharp contrast to the way her face lit up with delight, or how her words ran together as she spoke faster and faster until she was almost out of breath, her tongue working in a furious race with her brain, never able to get the words out fast enough." -Run on? Never! This line was totally wicked. Loved it.

Excellent. Every little bit of dialog and description was perfect. I could practically hear the inflection in both their voices. You write with major skill, exactly like how I wish it would have turned out.

I thought these first few chapters were a little rough, but the ones with Rory and Jess are totally awesome!

Great chapter! The last bit was the best. Very promising. The way you worked in the A to B was very good.

I totally forgot about this story... i really hope you finish it someday

Hey, I am a new reader, and I am really impressed with this fic. I really want you to update! Please?

This story is really interesting to me, I've always wondered what would happen if Rory reacted differently after her thing with Dean. Because, you know, I was really dissapointed about that (and many other interactions) that go on with Rorry/Jess in the show. Anyways, I think your story is great :D Please update soon!

Please finish this story! I love it and im looking forward to se where it all leads!

you so need to update this fic! i mean like now, wait scrach that i mean like yesterday! it's great and your writing is amazing, so Gilmoresque! i really love it, it's refreshing and even though it's been more than a year i really hope you didn't gave up on this fic.

This chapter didn't suck. I really liked it. Actually I really liked the whole story which is why I am upset that there is no chapter 12 after 11. You should update.

This is a great story.
Really different season 5 rewrite.

Don't forget about it.

hehehe, luv the "cute guys from CSI" line. so true.