real well done. liked it, hated the scene but it was entrancing.

this was heart-wrenching!

^_^ more? please?

It's too late for please, so "Thank you."

Wow, this is so good. Poor Shika. I really hope Chouji wakes up. Write a sequel? Please?

I can honestly say I loved this.
It was so beautifully written. The structure in it's entirely was perfect, his thoughts and actions, and the breathing scenes, perfectly placed. A very moving story. I only wish there was more!
Bravo my dear, I positively loved it.

I have to say you're becoming one of my favorite authors...excellent as always.

*fav*

I really love this.
It flows very well with the occasional rise and fall.

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It was sad.
I really don't know what else to say.
Wonderful.

I like!

aw, that was really wonderful.

short, but i love the way it's placed down. shikamaru's thoughts are he watches his best friend fighting against death, and worrying whether he will wake up or not (too scared to admit he could as well die).

wonderful shot, really, one could feel the emotions dripping from each of shika's thoughts.

thanks for writing it.

SOY

So sweet! There isnt enough ShikaChou shounen-ai in the world!

These two have the best relationship ever. I firmly thought so before reading this and sure as hell think it now.

"But here and now, sitting in a cheap plastic chair and watching the other’s chest rise and fall and rise and fall and . . .

Rise. Please rise.

Thank you."

That? That is as close to a perfect sentence (sentences, whatever) as I've seen. Wow. The rise-fall theme was used brilliantly.
Keep it up.

;.; I think it was awsome and Chouji is way better then Shikamaru. ~hmph~ =.=

THAT'S JUST GROS!
WAIT A SEC THIS MY STORY...HEHEHE^_^
LOVE THE SHIKIMARA!
KILL CHOUJI!
LOVE SHIKIMARA!
KILL CHOUJI!

I really liked this one. I could see shikmaru worrying over that

XDD SDKFJSDKFL AW. That was sweet. Please and thank you. AWESOME. This is the first ChoujiShika fic I read.