No, why'd you have to stop writing at such a crucial moment? This story is really good, it has such a unique storyline, and putting one of my favorite couples in it just makes it better! I woul dlove to see you continue this story! I'm putting it on my watch list, just in case~ I love Raptor-1, I hope he survives so he can talk to Yoshito and his "girlfriend" agian!

this is such a wonderfull story
very well written
wonder, when this'll be updated

Oh man that was so cool. I can't wait to read what happens next. Love last three senteces of this chapter. Please update as soon as possible.

Okay, i'll die if i don't hear the rest of that story! Please! Continue it! I need to know what happens next! I'll be waiting!!

Well. I must say that I'm sorry I didn't get an opportunity to read this earlier. I've sort of gotten myself into a bind, working on 5 different stories simultaneously (eh, it's my own fault), so I don't read as much fiction by other writers as I used to.
I can see you're a fan of hand-to-hand combat; your descriptions come off well. That the parents have a cooperative/adversarial relationship gives that element a lot of potential for future development.
Urumi is "broken"? Can't help it, but the first thing that reminds me of is part of the plot for and old-school anime, "Black Magic M-66", probably because I saw it most recently. I just have an image now in my head of her running amok.
Anyway, you are quite technically proficient, with no grammar or spelling errors that I could find. Please continue. And don't stop trying to push GTO fics to another level.
Thanks for the tribute.
W.

another story again :) i know i'm not in authority to say this, but it would be better if you would write your own story.. you know a different one. giving a tribute to someone is nice, but you should construct your own plot. you have a great talent in writing, so why not try making your own plot instead of basing them to other stories? :) i hope to see more of you in this section and please update :)

Good story, I have always been a big fan of the Kikuchi-Urumi relationship. Please update quickly.