'preppy', 'jock', they wouldn't really talk like that, they're British, not American, unless this is suppose to be OOC or AU, I like it so far though :D

it would have been a lot better if you didnt make them cry,and gay. and if you kept with the facts. its truly disguting.

No, kissing is slash. Kissing each other did make them gay. That would never happen if you were working with their canon character's real personalities.

Lestrange wouldn't be at Hogwarts at that time either.

Mister Steroid - wizards wouldn't use or know what steriods are
What year are they in? Only first year have flight lessons

Lucius is like three years above Snape and James

Snape and Bellatrix would have never gone to school together

Also, instead of calling someone an idiot, use the word git or prat

Just 5o let you know, if you wanted this to be a more realistic fanfiction, ** would be poofs, they wouldn't ay **, jock, or use the adjective preppy (going back to the first chapter) or Mister Antsy Pants...
just trying to help [=

hahaha that was so awesome, I love the end, just perfect :D

that was so sweet, though I can't tell you how much i wish this were slash haha, I'm a huge slash fan :D
but this is great ... ah just so sweet!

oh my gosh, would you just look at the beginnings of friends ship!

nasty little buggers aren't they?
I liked Lucius' reaction though, great :P

haha perfect, uterly perfect, great job

hahah crafty little idea you have, well done so far

alright i'm not trying to be overly critical, i loved this, it was very funny (especially the overlly horny slytherins) but i do think you should've carried it out for the "week to make the potion" i think there was a lot more that could've been done, it just felt like a really sudden ending... just a thought...

It was okay. I have read a bit better... but it was your 1st so i think you did a pretty good job! It was a bit funny at some points. I'm a critic :) But... The only thing I can crtisize is I wanted it to really take 1 week for the potion, and see what the two would do. I mean... what about when they needed to take a bath! :) Well... nicely done!

8D
this is an amazing story so far~!
I love it!